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(Ok, yes, it's a therapy haiku, but it's cheaper than alcohol or a psychotherapist. Notice "his" and not "their" or "a".)

Plums and apricots
Crooning on his griddle plate:
A fruity torch-song.

 

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Tinker

Yum.  I love haiku. 

But this is a little more than just a haiku. The title takes it to a new dimension.   Hmmm "break up"   "his griddle plate"   At least something was salvaged.

~~Tink


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tonyv

Marti, I'm no expert, but I'd call this a perfect haiku. It's very much to my liking.

48 minutes ago, Tinker said:

The title takes it to a new dimension.

I agree. I love the title.

49 minutes ago, Tinker said:

At least something was salvaged.

^This observation works on multiple levels. I couldn't have said it better.

Tony


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dcmarti1
On 8/7/2019 at 4:14 PM, Tinker said:

Yum.  I love haiku. 

But this is a little more than just a haiku. The title takes it to a new dimension.   Hmmm "break up"   "his griddle plate"   At least something was salvaged.

~~Tink

NO need to worry about me, but my inspiration was this:

https://genius.com/Langston-hughes-suicides-note-annotated

The title says more than the poem. (I think.)

Thanks.

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dcmarti1
On 8/7/2019 at 5:05 PM, tonyv said:

Marti, I'm no expert, but I'd call this a perfect haiku. It's very much to my liking.

I agree. I love the title.

^This observation works on multiple levels. I couldn't have said it better.

Tony

I am always glad when my Estonian role model likes something. :)

Thanks, as always, for reading.

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dcmarti1
8 hours ago, dr_con said:

Cheaper? Maybe, but just as sweet. Nice 'Therapy.' Enjoyed!

Thanks, Doctor. As always.

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badger11
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The title says more than the poem. (I think.)

Not for me. Very much like the poem.

best

Phil

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dcmarti1
On 8/10/2019 at 1:05 AM, badger11 said:

Not for me. Very much like the poem.

best

Phil

Thank you, as always. Best to you, too. (PS My attempt at yorkshire puddings failed spectacularly.)

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badger11

That is because you need cold and wet Yorkshire weather...alternatively read a Bronte novel 😀

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