jainrohit Posted February 21, 2013 Share Posted February 21, 2013 (edited) Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps -- Into its coffers , memories old and new Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !! No one stands ! Strong and weak equally collapse Decay thereafter into its residue Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps !! With each inhaled breath time tightens its straps With the final pull , spirit begins to spew Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !! Through milange of sad moments it sets up traps Fear and helplessness will then ensue ; Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps !! Once whirled into it ; our existence snaps We are locked eternally in cosmic glue ; Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !! Its powers bathe universe , they can't be cropped Slow it ; fast it -- but it can't be stopped Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !! Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps Edited February 21, 2013 by jainrohit Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted February 21, 2013 Share Posted February 21, 2013 Fun...and form..and red with double exclamation points. Enjoyed reading it very much. It's quirky to have science AND art work so well together. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jainrohit Posted February 21, 2013 Author Share Posted February 21, 2013 Fun...and form..and red with double exclamation points. Enjoyed reading it very much. It's quirky to have science AND art work so well together. oh thanks for the read sir ....... and enjoying it too :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted February 21, 2013 Share Posted February 21, 2013 I thought this was very clever in wording concept and of course adherence to the chosen form. The anagramatic use of warp and wrap I found especially clever jain. Frank Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted February 21, 2013 Share Posted February 21, 2013 A refreshing use of a classical form. Enjoyed thouroughly... DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jainrohit Posted February 22, 2013 Author Share Posted February 22, 2013 I thought this was very clever in wording concept and of course adherence to the chosen form. The anagramatic use of warp and wrap I found especially clever jain. Frank A refreshing use of a classical form. Enjoyed thouroughly... DC&J Thanks for the praises sir ....... it had been quite long that i had returned to poetry magnum opus. I enjoy the friendly feeling on this sites. Thanks once again Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 24, 2013 Share Posted February 24, 2013 Oh, I like it, too, jainrohit, especially your use of warp/wrap. It fits with the whole cosmic theme. One of these days I'll try a villanelle. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted February 25, 2013 Share Posted February 25, 2013 The discipline of the form tends to put some poets off.. perhaps because they fear it detracts from, or muddles their stream of thought.. but you handled this well. Enjoyed. Benjamin. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted April 6, 2013 Share Posted April 6, 2013 Been toying with some of these concepts myself lately (again). Kind of a rollicking feel that moves comfortably in the form. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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