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Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps

-- Into its coffers , memories old and new

Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

 

No one stands ! Strong and weak equally collapse

Decay thereafter into its residue

Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps !!

 

With each inhaled breath time tightens its straps

With the final pull , spirit begins to spew

Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

 

Through milange of sad moments it sets up traps

Fear and helplessness will then ensue ;

Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps !!

 

Once whirled into it ; our existence snaps

We are locked eternally in cosmic glue ;

Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

 

Its powers bathe universe , they can't be cropped

Slow it ; fast it -- but it can't be stopped

Ah We could halt or reverse it perhaps !!

Spacetime not only warps , but it also wraps

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Fun...and form..and red with double exclamation points. Enjoyed reading it very much. It's quirky to have science AND art work so well together.

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Fun...and form..and red with double exclamation points. Enjoyed reading it very much. It's quirky to have science AND art work so well together.

 

 

oh thanks for the read sir ....... and enjoying it too :)

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Frank E Gibbard

I thought this was very clever in wording concept and of course adherence to the chosen form. The anagramatic use of warp and wrap I found especially clever jain. Frank

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I thought this was very clever in wording concept and of course adherence to the chosen form. The anagramatic use of warp and wrap I found especially clever jain. Frank

A refreshing use of a classical form. Enjoyed thouroughly...

 

DC&J

 

Thanks for the praises sir ....... it had been quite long that i had returned to poetry magnum opus. I enjoy the friendly feeling on this sites. Thanks once again

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Oh, I like it, too, jainrohit, especially your use of warp/wrap. It fits with the whole cosmic theme. One of these days I'll try a villanelle.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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The discipline of the form tends to put some poets off.. perhaps because they fear it detracts from, or muddles their stream of thought.. but you handled this well. Enjoyed. Benjamin.

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David W. Parsley

Been toying with some of these concepts myself lately (again). Kind of a rollicking feel that moves comfortably in the form.

 

- Dave

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