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JoelJosol

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Hungry stomachs make sounds but some speeds

are measured in mach. So, how do you

measure an altercation between parent and child?

 

Heavy rains are advertised by a strong, cold

breeze. So, how did you miss the sound of tears

now tearing the inside skin of your ears?

 

Don't blame the weather. Birds still fly

together those of the same feather. Why not slow down?

What's the point of being there and not here?

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Fantastic poem, Joel, with a noteworthy message in the end:

... Why not slow down?

What's the point of being there and not here?

Keep 'em coming!

 

Tony

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Aleksandra

Dear Joel. This poem is fascinate. How this poem goes to the end , it's growing in more and more powerful poem.

 

I love this expression:

Heavy rains are advertised by a strong, cold

breeze. So, how did you miss the sound of tears

now tearing the inside skin of your ears?

Sound of tears sounds perfect , I love that expression.

 

Then at the last part

Birds still fly

together those of the same feather

that is wonderful written and with some melancholic voice.

 

Why not slow down?

What's the point of being there and not here?

This question is on the right place, very wise and very moving. This poem is wonderful Joel, I loved

 

Thank you so much for sharing this poem.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Thanks, Aleksandra, for the close read. I'm glad you identified key lines.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Heavy rains are advertised by a strong, cold

breeze.

 

i never thought this way and when i start to rebuild the picture, this something fascinates my dreams! then a question comes that moves heart:

 

how did you miss the sound of tears

now tearing the inside skin of your ears?

 

 

girls don't know what to do but they do to confuse us! why, even god could know this

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Don't blame the weather. Birds still fly

together those of the same feather. Why not slow down?

What's the point of being there and not here?

 

i told you girls are really full of mystery and also the most confused one in search of true love!

 

 

i still couldn't deal with it!

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