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September Memories


Terry L shuff

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Terry L shuff

prose intro.

  • I can feel September this morning.,
  • standing on the balcony. 
  • " Welcome cooling breeze, "  I breath deeply. 
  • Locusts buzzing in the trees, a serenty engulfs.
  • Autumn is early, hence I'll not complain.
  • Verse....Memories of childhood, Surge through the years,
  • making their apperance, I knew that you'd be here.
  • There I am ,as a boy, in the old backyard,
  • As now I felt that cooling breeze,
  • I smelled a fragrance ,of apple trees, 
  • a long ago September, Oh !  a little twing of heart.
  • Each season has its  memories,
  • that we recall through life.
  • My Heart will not forget them,
  • They are so much of me.
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Hi Terry,  This confuses me a bit.  

First   the dots or periods that proceed each line, what is the purpose of that?  I don't understand what this is communicating?

Second, you begin stating "prose intro" but there seems to be no break between prose and poem.  Am I missing something?

~~ Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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Terry,  That isn't line spacing you are choosing it is bullets for a list.

  • I type a line
  • Then I type another

Then I can stop the bullets simply by unclicking the icon

  1. or I can change the list to 1, 2, 3
  2. I use this feature in the reference section all of the time.

If you want to space your work

simply hitting enter will bring it down. 
Or if you want to keep your work tighter
press Shift then Enter.

Does this make sense?  ~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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Terry L shuff

Yes but I use an Android . I'll try it tomorrow.see if it works. I'll let you know. Thanks tink.

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I love the seasons. September, the approach of autumn -- you capture it well from the get go in L1-L5. I like how you then shift to times past in L6-L10.

The line that stands out the most, thought subtly, contains "I knew that you'd be here." I'm not sure what that means within your context, but I like it very much, how it speaks to me.

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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