douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 it felt as if I was falling falling in to a void deep within the universe and as i fell i could see the luminosity of outstretched hands fading as i tumbled deeper and deeper in to the secret depths of the cosmic womb and i was at once myself and everything limited and omnipresent captive and emancipated fearful and at peace and i fell past millions of memories and visions and experiences which had all mingled over time forming the fabric of my physicality both ephemeral and eternal human and divine and i fell past eons of light and darkness through mists containing stars and galaxies and planets and i thought am i falling or suspended are these secrets flowing and floating past me is there a centre or an end to all of this space? and then i saw the brightest light shining below me its radiance was overwhelmingly beautiful splendid filling up my eyes with brilliance and wisdom revealing the mysteries inherent in every form of consciousness across the entire spectrum of the universe and i fell in to swirling winds of light toward the eternal one the source and i saw a face as large as a supernova smiling at me it was my face. Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Doug, the poem I saw as a reflection of you. As a dreaming with opened eyes... musing... as i tumbled deeper and deeper in to the secret depths of the cosmic womb I love how this sound and how is expressed: and i was at once myself and everything limited and omnipresent captive and emancipated fearful and at peace The simplify end, talks a lot. I loved this poem Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Douglas, Well, for once (and this is personal opinion, not an objective crit;-) I have mixed feelings about this piece- While the images are direct and to the point, they also are very common- For me, what sets your voice is its personality, by which I mean unique personal vision, this 'felt' oddly generic for someone with your considerable talent. Also, I have a great deal of contention with the ending, not that the experience of 'I am god/cosmos/universe' is not a profound and valuable experience- I have just found it to be, too often, a major stumbling block to 'spiritual' progress- I can't count the number of times, individuals with similar visions have simply stopped, until the Mystery cracks their head open once again (Including, of course, myself) I really did enjoy the direct approach to a transpersonal subject, but do have hesitations on the lessons learned, which as I said, is a strongly personal opinion, although it does not reflect on you, rather on this particular piece- Anyone who can become the non-dual self in the birds eye, when running around a lake obviously 'gets it' Much Grace, DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 Hello douglas, Love the dream-like tone of this poem. With the poet the reader descends through the physical layers to a point where the body and spirit, the earth and heaven, the longing and the fulfillment elide in a blissful union. Particularly love these images: and i fell past millions of memories and visions and experiences which had all mingled over time forming the fabric of my physicality both ephemeral and eternal human and divine The meeting of 'past millions of memories, visions and experiences' gives a sense of time being suspended and the poet entering a reality beyond the human condition, a satori moment of pure light. Thank you for sharing meditative work. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 Oh, Dr Con! How you made me laugh and laugh with that last sentence of yours! Too funny for words and that little face just finished me off completely!!!! HA HA! Thanks so much for your crit, no matter how subjective - I always appreciate your keen eye and intelligence... It was a bit of piece to write - came more from a kind of vision I had while meditating - and by meditating I mean zazen - just sitting in quiet contemplation. I just had this sense of falling/moving, which we are all doing all the time through the universe; a sense of us all being one and not separate, and I was trying to communicate this unity through illustrating the concept that all is contained within a person. All that potential, all that beauty, all that thought, all of that evolution and creative genius - that god is not far away or this complicated abstraction, but right within oneself - we are perhaps cells in the omnipresent's body - and you are recognised and seen - and that this revealing or realisation of god through oneself - initially - helps to expand one's spiritual or formless eyes... Generic?! And Grace to you, Dr! Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 20, 2009 Share Posted May 20, 2009 The poem reads like an out-of-body experience, Douglas. This part has a profound peacefulness: and i fell past eons of light and darkness through mists containing stars and galaxies and planets and i thought am i falling or suspended are these secrets flowing and floating past me is there a centre or an end to all of this space? ... and the way this part says "everything will be revealed" affords comfort: and then i saw the brightest light shining below me its radiance was overwhelmingly beautiful splendid filling up my eyes with brilliance and wisdom revealing the mysteries inherent in every form of consciousness across the entire spectrum of the universe This gives the poem universal appeal. The title lead me to believe that the poem would recount something negative. Instead, it delivered a hit of bliss. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 Dearest Tony, Hello my friend. Thank you for your sensitive and kind crit and words. It is always refreshing to hear from you. Douglas Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 20, 2009 Author Share Posted May 20, 2009 and sweet alex! thank you for your beautiful words and comments too! always great to hear from you! Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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