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Sleepless in Occidental

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Tinker

April 4

Sleepless in Occidental

I've come to realize
along with getting old
comes
         confidence,
         wisdom,
         knowledge,
         and experience.
I love that part of it.

Unfortunately,
it also brings a nightly
dose of
         creaky joints,
         a thirty year old mattress,
         the need to pee,
         mushroom heat,
         and tingly feet.
Hence, fitful sleep.

Yesterday I bought a new mattress.
                      ~~Judi Van Gorder

Prompt: fitful sleep


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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JoelJosol

I like the parallel structure presenting a contrast visually and semantically. It made me laugh. How true!

 


"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Tinker

Thanks Joel,  And it is true, the mattress is being delivered Sunday.

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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David W. Parsley

No fancy imagery or mastery of a difficult fixed form here: just excellent use of white space, balance of diction and image.  And a very witty final line!  I really like this one!

Thanks, Tink!

 - David

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badger11

Age coloured with characteristic humour. Love the mushroom heat.

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