Tinker Posted April 4, 2019 Share Posted April 4, 2019 April 4Sleepless in Occidental I've come to realize along with getting old comes confidence, wisdom, knowledge, and experience. I love that part of it. Unfortunately, it also brings a nightly dose of creaky joints, a thirty year old mattress, the need to pee, mushroom heat, and tingly feet. Hence, fitful sleep. Yesterday I bought a new mattress. ~~Judi Van Gorder Prompt: fitful sleep Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 5, 2019 Share Posted April 5, 2019 I like the parallel structure presenting a contrast visually and semantically. It made me laugh. How true! Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 5, 2019 Author Share Posted April 5, 2019 Thanks Joel, And it is true, the mattress is being delivered Sunday. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 5, 2019 Share Posted April 5, 2019 Oh yes. Good Call! 😉 Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted April 21, 2019 Share Posted April 21, 2019 No fancy imagery or mastery of a difficult fixed form here: just excellent use of white space, balance of diction and image. And a very witty final line! I really like this one! Thanks, Tink! - David Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted April 24, 2019 Share Posted April 24, 2019 Age coloured with characteristic humour. Love the mushroom heat. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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