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Sleepless in Occidental


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April 4

Sleepless in Occidental

I've come to realize
along with getting old
         and experience.
I love that part of it.

it also brings a nightly
dose of
         creaky joints,
         a thirty year old mattress,
         the need to pee,
         mushroom heat,
         and tingly feet.
Hence, fitful sleep.

Yesterday I bought a new mattress.
                      ~~Judi Van Gorder

Prompt: fitful sleep

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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I like the parallel structure presenting a contrast visually and semantically. It made me laugh. How true!


"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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  • 3 weeks later...
David W. Parsley

No fancy imagery or mastery of a difficult fixed form here: just excellent use of white space, balance of diction and image.  And a very witty final line!  I really like this one!

Thanks, Tink!

 - David

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