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This dying man hears angels tumbling

down like grains in an hour glass,
he stares into the circles in the park
pond-reflections never settle. Leaves
fall from a near by tree like former selves
unable to reach the rings inside the tree
grain, the last leaf falls  like an angel's
tongue providing the location for the rope,
the park is the bell the pond is the clapper.
Fading with the song within a song of a bird
his circle is complete as the earth recedes.  

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dcmarti1

There are elements of peace, acceptance, AND maudlin all at the same time. Skillful. I liked the

Leaves

fall from a near by tree like former selves

Evocative.

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tonyv

The leaves' distinction from the tree itself, how they're unable to reach the rings inside the tree/grain is profound and captures my imagination.

Tony


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Tinker

Barry, the first two lines are quite an opener.  I love that the image has motion.

~~Tink


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David W. Parsley

Agree with Tony on that startling action and motive of the former selves embodied in the leaves.  Here is the highly original observation that shakes the poem.

 - Dave

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