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Stretching It Out

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Stretching It Out

The subliminal stain of pain,
reminder of stage, space and strain,
returns again each morning,
it's fetched and stretched and for awhile
tells of life lived, a chosen style
with fragile thread, a warning.

Though my body, once quick and strong,
with time has mellowed, not so wrong.
My dance song, a playful tune, 
is slowed but rings of all good things 
and challenges that bring me wings.
Still, stings from age come too soon.
                             ~~Judi Van Gorder


Notes:
Verse Form:  Cywydd Llosgyrnog  nw.gif


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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dcmarti1

"come too soon"

All surrounded by talent, expertise, and form. :)

The non-apparent scheme (until I looked at your link) reminded me, at first, of Anglo-Saxon syllabic and alliterative verse. You used the form perfectly to get your point across.

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Tinker

Thanks Marti,  I have been weed whacking, mowing and rototilling for the last 3 days and woke up almost frozen in pain this morning.  I had to ease my body up and out of bed.  I hate taking pills but took 2 Aleve and by the time I drank my first cup of coffee, my joints were pliable again.  I wrote this poem while waiting for the Aleve to kick in.   As they say, getting old is not for sissies.    

The form is from a weekly challenge at another website.   Last week it was the Rictameter and this week it is the Cywydd Llosgyrnog.  It was fun to play with rhyme and alliteration.  The Welsh forms demand a liberal dose of both.  

~~judi


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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tonyv

Judi, the poem and your reply to Marti confirm by belief that one should avoid all yard work.

Tony 😉


Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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badger11

 hi Tink

The reality of the 'fragile thread'  and the life of 'My dance song, a playful tune' are balanced and reflected in the form. There is a strength in the form that articulates the voice. Life is still embraced. Especially liked the use of mellowed'.

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badge

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Tinker
13 hours ago, tonyv said:

Judi, the poem and your reply to Marti confirm by belief that one should avoid all yard work.

Tony 😉


Ha, Tony, Yard work may be hard on the body but I think it is good for it and it is especially good for the soul.  

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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6 hours ago, badger11 said:

The reality of the 'fragile thread'  and the life of 'My dance song, a playful tune' are balanced and reflected in the form. There is a strength in the form that articulates the voice. Life is still embraced. Especially liked the use of mellowed'.

best

badge

Thanks, Badge.  This form was fun to play with.

~~Tink 


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For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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