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Poet's Quill - revision

Wonder of words ignite this quest
from time forgot to time unguessed.
Charmed be the quill of light,
Charmed be the poet's plight.

Plots placed in words for all to read
of creeds and deeds with bardic seeds.
Charmed be the quill of light,
Charmed be the poet's plight.

From the god within new chants emerge,
a cry, a sigh, a soulful purge.
Charmed be the poet's plight
Charmed be the quill of light.
               . . . . . ~~Judi Van Gorder

Charmed. - original

Wonder of words ignite this quest
from time forgot to time unknown.
Charmed is the quill of light,
Charmed is the poet's plight.

Plots placed in words upon a page
of creeds and deeds with bardic seeds.
Charmed is the quill of light,
Charmed is the poet's plight.

From the god within new chants emerge,
a cry, a sigh, a soulful purge.
Charmed is the poet's plight
Charmed is the quill of light.


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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badger11

 

Charmed be the quill of light,

Love the notion of a 'quill of light'.

 

I think writing comes at different speeds Tink.

 

I try to write two poems per month minimum - depending on work commitments. My intention is not to let the writing become an 'outpour' ; or on the other hand I would not want to become silent by becoming too self-critical of its imperfections.

 

Always a difficult balance. A quiet forum may fade away, but a busy one may overwhelm with noise - a socialising rather than writing forum.

 

Just some thoughts.

 

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Tinker

Thanks badge, it is a rewrite of an example poem I wrote to demonstrate the genre Charms. By stengthening the rhyme and changing the tense of the refrain I think the poem has been improved. I'm trying to capture that magic of invoking a charm.

 

At this point I'm revisiting old poems and rewriting a lot. Especially poems I wrote as examples of form or genre. Most of them were buried in the reference section with no feedback. Revisiting with a polished eye, I'm adjusting a word or two and or changing a line or punctuation. When they were written I often just wanted to demonstrate the form or genre. Now I'm looking at them as poems needing polish. I would like them to be better poetry in their own right separate from the form. I've learned a lot over the years and I can use that knowledge to improve my older writing. I do attempt to haiku most days just to stay in the groove,

 

But I also miss some of the old members. I hope to see some more poetry here.

 

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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badger11

 

At this point I'm revisiting old poems and rewriting a lot. Especially poems I wrote as examples of form or genre. Most of them were buried in the reference section with no feedback. Revisiting with a polished eye, I'm adjusting a word or two and or changing a line or punctuation. When they were written I often just wanted to demonstrate the form or genre. Now I'm looking at them as poems needing polish. I would like them to be better poetry in their own right separate from the form.

 

 

Hi Tink,

It would be interesting if you posted the original with the revision. As you know, I am always interested the 'evolution' of a poem.

 

all the best

 

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Frank E Gibbard

charmingly put in your quiet style,

a quintessence of quillwomanship I'd sayTink

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dr_con

A poetry is essentially a spell -- and indeed this is! Loved your reworking Tink, really a lovely piece.

 

Juris


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Ok badge I added the original for you to see. Not big changes but I think they changed the whole feel of the poem.

 

~~Tink

 

Particularly like the tweak to 'unguessed' - more music in the edit.

 

cheers

 

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Tinker

Thanks badge, I wish I could take credit for that tweek but it was suggested to me by someone else. I agree it was perfect for me and I ran with it.

 

~~Tink


~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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YarnSpinner

Like a true poet...a poem when completed and posted, then revisited at a later time with a fresh outlook, will most always find room for improvement; like the honing of a knife blade... You will stroke it softly to near perfection. I like it. YarnSpinner

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Thanks badge, I wish I could take credit for that tweek but it was suggested to me by someone else. I agree it was perfect for me and I ran with it.

 

~~Tink

 

But you listened Tink! Not everyone does - except to their own voice :smile:

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