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Lady Flora


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Smaller than a pea

quieter than a bee

winging

in front of my eyes

fluttering

in transparent flight

bird of mini

 

noiselessly

she perches on my booklet

clothed in dotted scarlet

exquisite by nature

a befriending creature

Lady Flora--

lovely as we call

 

moving--

as if wheeled, gliding

stirred--

flies away

my timid fay

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Thanks badge for appreciation. I’ve added one more line a befriending creature to S2, which tells of the most important virtues of Lady Flora ( I failed to find a better place or expression for this in the first input )

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I agree with Badge and Dr. Con. This is delightful, Worm! :)

 

I especially like "bird of mini." I also like "a befriending creature"; I'm glad you added that in.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Warm, wonderful and whimsical worm... Agree with badge and the beauty of the Ladybug- just a sweet write..

 

DC&J

 

thanks dr_con! but I would call her ladybird, the same meaning as ladybug though.

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I agree with Badge and Dr. Con. This is delightful, Worm! :)

 

I especially like "bird of mini." I also like "a befriending creature"; I'm glad you added that in.

 

Tony

I like your short but sweet comment Tony. thanks for it.

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Light and sweet. I like the sound of the beginning two lines, but semantically I struggle with line two.

 

Smaller than a pea -- the comparison with a pea gives the reader a picture that this creature is even smaller than a pea.

quieter than a bee -- the comparison with a bee puzzles me a bit. Usually, bee is noisy. Does it imply that it also makes noise but not as loud as a bee? But the word "noiselessly" at the beginning of the second stanza doesn't support this interpretation.

 

This poem is light as a breeze.

 

Lake

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Light and sweet. I like the sound of the beginning two lines, but semantically I struggle with line two.

 

Smaller than a pea -- the comparison with a pea gives the reader a picture that this creature is even smaller than a pea.

 

normally we don't do such a comparison, but with your fogs, I read some relevant material that backs my line. it says, in general, a ladybird is half size of a pea.

quieter than a bee -- the comparison with a bee puzzles me a bit. Usually, bee is noisy. Does it imply that it also makes noise but not as loud as a bee? But the word "noiselessly" at the beginning of the second stanza doesn't support this interpretation.

 

sure you can read the hidden meaning for a less noisy ladybird. but who knows she doesn't make any noise when she gorges herself on aphids? I can even bodly assert that she screams, just imperceptible to our unaided ears.

 

This poem is light as a breeze.

 

I'm glad it carries something lighter to you.

 

Lake

 

Thanks for your peruse Lake.

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