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learned about Nonets from Tinker- had to try one

 

Im thinking that it has to be true

just because you can use big words

you think that you have something

something you can hold to

something tangible

and so you do

you hold tight

you feel

safe
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Hey Rumi, I am so pleased you gave this a try. The result is really quite good. Although you followed this form exactly, the piece reminds me of a WC Williams piece because of the way you direct the poem to a particuar person, like you are speaking directly to them. I like it.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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I like the causticity, Rumisong. I also appreciate the implied distinction between feeling safe and being safe, a fine point I often bring to the attention of those who would disarm. There's a world of difference between the two.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Even I would like to give a try to this form :). It looks easy :unsure: or no? Anyway, I am not so much concerned about the form as all of you know, and I can not tell much :), but the poem looks very nice, and the shape also. I like it, Rumi.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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