rumisong Posted October 2, 2010 Share Posted October 2, 2010 learned about Nonets from Tinker- had to try one Im thinking that it has to be true just because you can use big words you think that you have something something you can hold to something tangible and so you do you hold tight you feel safe Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted October 2, 2010 Share Posted October 2, 2010 Hey Rumi, I am so pleased you gave this a try. The result is really quite good. Although you followed this form exactly, the piece reminds me of a WC Williams piece because of the way you direct the poem to a particuar person, like you are speaking directly to them. I like it. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted October 4, 2010 Share Posted October 4, 2010 Hmm, maybe I should give it a try one day... Nice one. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted October 4, 2010 Share Posted October 4, 2010 A fun adaption of the form- I chuckled and smiled;-) DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rumisong Posted October 4, 2010 Author Share Posted October 4, 2010 Im glad this came off, thanks all Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 4, 2010 Share Posted October 4, 2010 I like the causticity, Rumisong. I also appreciate the implied distinction between feeling safe and being safe, a fine point I often bring to the attention of those who would disarm. There's a world of difference between the two. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted October 9, 2010 Share Posted October 9, 2010 Even I would like to give a try to this form :). It looks easy or no? Anyway, I am not so much concerned about the form as all of you know, and I can not tell much :), but the poem looks very nice, and the shape also. I like it, Rumi. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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