Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted June 10, 2009 Share Posted June 10, 2009 Damned if I Do, Damned if I Don’t You will never know how many tears I have cried, how many miles I have walked, how many days I have tried to succeed, or how many nights I didn’t sleep. If I promised you the moon and the stars, Do you believe it? Damned if I do ask you out for a dinner date. Damned if I don’t for I will never know the answer one way or the other. If I told you I had a heart of gold, Would you believe it? Dancing with the stars, I look at the sunrise. I hear the birds chirping that sing with my lips. I won’t get fooled again at sunset if you just walk away from me without a good bye. I swallowed my pride to long ago to give a damn. I was revived in a car accident, now the world looks cold and distant. I live alone but I won’t get fooled again damned if I do, damned if I don’t. Baby you walked out my door to long ago for me to remember you and the way we made love. Now I realize it was only lust. How I cried when you first left me. For awhile all I did was look at the wall and count the popcorn ceilings bumps in the room I slept in. Now I write poetry about romance and love. All I seem to dream about Is writing the perfect song Singing it to you And making love for over two hours So we can feel bliss. I have set the standards high. Will you Nalene or Elizabeth Watch the sunset with me and grow old together with me? For I am damned if I do And damned if I don’t But I still love you. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 10, 2009 Share Posted June 10, 2009 I thought your use of 'damned' was very effective, had the right edge. I won’t get fooled again This reminded me too much of the original song lyric badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 10, 2009 Share Posted June 10, 2009 An interesting piece! Many of the 'to' should be 'too', but the lyrical "Who-ness" of the song was quite engaging. I also think the last Stanza is a bit unnecessary, but do what you feel right;-) Many Thanks, DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted June 10, 2009 Author Share Posted June 10, 2009 hi DC, i couldnt agree with you more after reading it a few times aloud i deleted the last stanza. thanks for your input. as for my name it is victor michael lashewitz but i use a pen name which is larsen michael callirhoe. callirhoe is a greek and aramaic word. i had studied the greek language a little and decided to use this word callirhoe as a pen name. it means a couple of things. lashe or pronounced lashah is hebrew for callirhoe which is part of my last name but in the aramaic language but is also used in the greek language. nick tselpides knows more about this word w3hich is a street and hotel in greece also lol. as i get older i let people call me victor but when i was younger my family called me michael. i read your comment before you changed it. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted June 10, 2009 Author Share Posted June 10, 2009 hi badge, i thought about using will not instead of won't because of that who song but it flowed better the way i ended up writing it. if you think will not flows better than won't i will change it in my poem. cheers my poetry friend. victor aka larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 Hi Victor, You express the no-win situation quite well. I like this: I swallowed my pride to long ago to give a damn and this: For awhile all I did was look at the wall and count the popcorn ceilings bumps in the room I slept in the most. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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