Aleksandra Posted June 11, 2009 Share Posted June 11, 2009 Morning Kiss The sun warms your day with a kiss in the moon-set. The day is over for me; I fade into your shadow. A waking smile opens your door with an unforgotten key; it closes mine . .again. 1 The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 11, 2009 Share Posted June 11, 2009 Your poem felt sad Aleks, though in all endings there are are beginnings... badge Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted June 11, 2009 Share Posted June 11, 2009 aleks is this a old poem or a new one. this makes me think you broke up with alexander. either way very melachonic indeed. this poem makes me think you are seeking a new sunrise because the last sunset you experienced didn't go well as the key you mentioned as locking the door to a old relationshoip. victor Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 A fascinating piece- what disapeers, the moon, the dream the twilight kiss? Who is it that leaves, who arrives? I don't feel the melancholy as much, but there is a liminal suchness about this which outlines a mood at once familiar and yet mysterious... A great little piece... Many Thanks, DC thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 14, 2009 Share Posted June 14, 2009 Love is evident in the frustration of longing, Aleksandra. Very sad. There is a sense of perpetuity, an "ongoing-ness," in the emotions expressed by the speaker and felt by this reader. I love your use of "moon-set." Tony Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 14, 2009 Author Share Posted June 14, 2009 Your poem felt sad Aleks, though in all endings there are are beginnings... badge Thank you badge for your thoughts. It's always nice to read you. Bw, thank you for the wonderful reading of my Tale poem. I love it how it sounds. Aleksandra The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 14, 2009 Author Share Posted June 14, 2009 Victor you made me smile . Interesting reading of yours and opservation. The poem it is most fresh on my side I post when I wrote . without review. Anyway when I read your thoughts I read my poem again, and I saw that it makes sense all what you say about the key, but it's not that key what Im talking about . This key is more painfull. Thanks for the reading Vic. Aleksandra The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 14, 2009 Author Share Posted June 14, 2009 A fascinating piece- what disapeers, the moon, the dream the twilight kiss? Who is it that leaves, who arrives? I don't feel the melancholy as much, but there is a liminal suchness about this which outlines a mood at once familiar and yet mysterious... A great little piece... Many Thanks, DC DC glad that you got some points here. Everything is there, the moon, the kiss all of it, so it's left only the narrator who can disapeer. Thanks for your warm comment. Aleksandra The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted June 14, 2009 Author Share Posted June 14, 2009 Love is evident in the frustration of longing, Aleksandra. Very sad. There is a sense of perpetuity, an "ongoing-ness," in the emotions expressed by the speaker and felt by this reader. I love your use of "moon-set." Tony Tony glad you like the use of moon-set. If there is sunset, it should be the moon-set also right? . Thanks for noticing the sadness. Aleksandra The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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