goldenlangur Posted July 12, 2009 Share Posted July 12, 2009 three days, three nights rain and wind pummel the valley your prayer flags drip what need have we to weep? Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
rhymeguy Posted July 12, 2009 Share Posted July 12, 2009 A simple and poignant picture, as if nature was weeping for you so that you could save your tears for another time. lovely, rg Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted July 12, 2009 Share Posted July 12, 2009 three days, three nightsrain and wind pummel the valley your prayer flags drip what need have we to weep? Lovely - three days, three nights....... - perfect. Remineds me of the poetical spirit of Jacques Prévert. and to the rain here these days :). " Prayer flags " - I love that expression GL. I look forward for more tanka of yours. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted July 13, 2009 Share Posted July 13, 2009 The rain has a mesmerizing effect, especially in a period of mourning. That unsettling feeling pervades this somber tanka. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted July 13, 2009 Share Posted July 13, 2009 GL, your poem is powerful because of on this one powerful image - dripping flag. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted July 14, 2009 Author Share Posted July 14, 2009 (edited) Thank you very much rg for an eloquent review. You've caught the intent so well. goldenlangur Edited July 14, 2009 by goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted July 14, 2009 Author Share Posted July 14, 2009 Thank you very much Alexander for this thought: three days, three nights....... - perfect. Remineds me of the poetical spirit of Jacques Prévert. We too have a very wet summer here and there was cyclone Aila in May. You are always so encouraging about my tanka. I'm glad that the image of the prayer flag works. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted July 14, 2009 Author Share Posted July 14, 2009 (edited) Hi Tony, Thank you so much for a considered read of this tanka. I like how you describe the effect of the rain: mesmerizing to link with that disengaged sense that death engenders in the grieving. goldenlangur Edited July 14, 2009 by goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted July 14, 2009 Author Share Posted July 14, 2009 JoelJosol, I appreciate this very much: GL, your poem is powerful because of on this one powerful image - dripping flag. Thank you. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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