goldenlangur Posted July 26, 2009 Posted July 26, 2009 through monsoon clouds cleaving wings of a late plane just for a moment a glimpse of Scorpio's sting and your fading smile Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.
Tinker Posted July 27, 2009 Posted July 27, 2009 Hi gl, I got an ominous feeling reading this poem. The emotion hangs over the poem like a cloud. You are a master at drawing emotion from an image. Beautiful. I love the images "monsoon clouds cleaving wings" "glimpse of Scorpio's sting". They are as exotic and intriguing as I have come to expect from you. ~~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
tonyv Posted July 27, 2009 Posted July 27, 2009 Temporal elements seem to be central to the theme of this poem -- separation. I think the late plane is what moves me the most. It ties in perfectly with Scorpio's sting and, most forlornly, with your fading smile. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
goldenlangur Posted July 28, 2009 Author Posted July 28, 2009 Thank you for such a generous compliment. I'm delighted that the images work to convey the emotion. I like how you've read an ominous feeling. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.
goldenlangur Posted July 28, 2009 Author Posted July 28, 2009 Thank you Tony for this considered reading. I like how you've read separation and a temporal element in the images of Scorpio's sting and fading smile. I was not sure about late so your comment is very helpful. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.
dr_con Posted July 28, 2009 Posted July 28, 2009 GL- I completely agree with Tony- your ability to convey raw emotion thru delicate images is astounding. Enjoyed immensely! DC Quote thegateless.org
Aleksandra Posted August 4, 2009 Posted August 4, 2009 Goldenlangur - I like how your words slide in this tanka with one unusual state of feelings. All is there - complete. I loved this one - than you for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia
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