demonicdevidom Posted August 16, 2009 Share Posted August 16, 2009 Id die,to kiss you. To tie lips,like a knot. And to,never let loose. To never,let you go. And let,time flow,so slow. To never,go down. Only drown,in your arms. That I'd,Never deny. Your arms,That make. All harm,go away. and to stay,with only you. Never alone,again,you drained, My loneliness,now I live. Happiness. __________________ Iv been living the life. A written dream. pursued by many men. sent to the battle field. at an early age. how I developed this rage. towards all of man kind. I tried to find a reason. for this treason but. as the seasons went by. I gave up,laid a tomb stone. Now in my grave. __________________ To run and hide. And never come back. Do I lack the strength. Of this,so sure to come. I can see it now. In your eyes,lost. For an eternity. Close,to divinity. You make me feel. Is this real,how I feel. So sealed,waiting for you. To unseal me,I know now. Your a dream,come true. So soon you came. Now I feel bloomed. I strive to live again. __________________ Since the very instant. It was instinct. The distinct feeling. For instance. For one chance. At this romance. Your glance. That threw a lance. At my heart, in advance. The beat that dances. And with the sense. Of the intense feeling. I feel for you. Unexpected. What you did. To my heart. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 17, 2009 Share Posted August 17, 2009 Welcome, Dominick. I understand you're a friend of Victor. He's been a member here for a long time, so it's nice to have you join, also. I took your poems, for which you made separate replies, and consolidated them into one post. Usually, when we post poems, we put each one in a separate topic. That way, it's easier for people to reply to the poem(s). But these, like, in many cases, haiku, are short enough to be inluded in one post. Therefore, I think it's good that you posted them together. The four poems cover an entire gamut of emotions. From love in the first one, to anger in the second, to fear and apprehension in the third, they eventually come full circle to love in the last. I like this expression (from the first one) a lot: "Your arms that make all harm go away ..." I enjoyed reading these. Thanks for sharing them. Enjoy the site. Tony :) Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted August 17, 2009 Share Posted August 17, 2009 (edited) hello dominick, i enjoyed this series of poems. very smooth read aloud. i enjoyed them very much. gamut of the poems sunject matter. love in the first and fourth one. i loved the firsy one. the second one show shostility, and the third one showed a different look at you. enjoyed reading them very much. victor Edited August 17, 2009 by Larsen M. Callirhoe Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted August 19, 2009 Share Posted August 19, 2009 Hello Dominick. Nice to see you posting your work. Your poetry reminds me on the old times while I was lost in poetry :) on your age when I published my book full of black :). You are doing fine, the most important thing is that you started so every day you will feel how the poetry comes from you more and more. As all of begginers, you need to tight the verse, but that will happen step by step. You have nice background in your poems, what comes from your talent, and all the rest will come when it will be the time. I have one friend, old poet who was used to say: read, read, and just read... I like what I read. Keep writing. Welcome again. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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