demonicdevidom Posted August 17, 2009 Share Posted August 17, 2009 In the night. I thrive for you. When the stars shine down. Upon our souls. Time becomes a broken glass. That can provoke a lot of things. Tonight is all I need. To make you feel so right With the sight of the moonlight. That lights over us. And makes our love seem so bright. I know its right to say. I love you my dearest. When you rest on my chest. You can hear the beat of my heart. Beating a rhythm that,would never ..............tear us apart................ Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted August 18, 2009 Share Posted August 18, 2009 Interesting. The last stanza is pitch perfect @ once passionate and vaguely threatening. Welcome! I look forward to more work! ;-) DC Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted August 18, 2009 Share Posted August 18, 2009 HI Dominick, the last stanza is very classy. the first two stanzas have excellent metaphors and the third stanza is a charming similie, i enjoyed this. you have talent. when i was your age i wish i was only half as smart as you. keep them coming my young friend. hopefully one day you will find the right companion in life. till than enjoy all the fish in the sea. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted August 19, 2009 Share Posted August 19, 2009 hopefully one day you will find the right companion in life. till than enjoy all the fish in the sea. :D Vic you made me smile :), can be metaphore also. Dominick you are doing just fine. Nice expressions. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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