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demonicdevidom

Abandoned and condemned,

I stand alone,

In the shallow woods,

Starved with no food,

All I needed was you,

But I knew it was to good,

To be true,

How could you,

do this to me,

after all,

We have been through,

was it enough,

I guess not,

that's why my life is so rough,

Its hard to be tough,

when you lost it all,

This post is for you....

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

very smooth poem dominick. some people think commas are necessaryb and others don't. i guess it depends how the poem is written, all a comma in a poem does is emphasize where the narrator wants pauses in his or her poem. i enjoued the poem by you.

 

cheers larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Interesting emotional expression Dominick.

 

I like how the poem starts:

 

Abandoned and condemned,

I stand alone,

In the shallow woods,

Starved with no food,

All I needed was you,

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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