demonicdevidom Posted August 20, 2009 Share Posted August 20, 2009 Abandoned and condemned, I stand alone, In the shallow woods, Starved with no food, All I needed was you, But I knew it was to good, To be true, How could you, do this to me, after all, We have been through, was it enough, I guess not, that's why my life is so rough, Its hard to be tough, when you lost it all, This post is for you.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted August 22, 2009 Share Posted August 22, 2009 very smooth poem dominick. some people think commas are necessaryb and others don't. i guess it depends how the poem is written, all a comma in a poem does is emphasize where the narrator wants pauses in his or her poem. i enjoued the poem by you. cheers larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted August 27, 2009 Share Posted August 27, 2009 Interesting emotional expression Dominick. I like how the poem starts: Abandoned and condemned,I stand alone, In the shallow woods, Starved with no food, All I needed was you, Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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