Building the Temple: Phase 1

[dr_con]

Building the Temple: Phase 1

 

"Here comes the bad man"

announced to a mostly empty bus

 

an artisan with a need for speed

starting and stopping empty

gilded conversations

crafting stainglass

panels to-let

 

the light in He understands

 

continuously

continuously

continuously

 

rejected

there are bigger blueprints

moving from nooks the size of grain

directly to scales of mountains and oceans

 

beneath the circumscribed sight of the Sun

One of several-billion an example to grasp

the unknowable-infinite and something

to hold-unto when dealing with gods

 

who have gone a little crazy

trying to construct such

a small fleshy container

myopic in scope

for it all.

Edited August 20, 2009 by dr_con

[tonyv]

Perhaps I will figure out your creative formula, Dr. Con. :icon_cool: ... Perhaps I should ride the bus more often! :)

 

The poem is well-crafted. There's not too much and not too little. Nothing is out of place. This part seems to say (with a bit of irony) that God has a sense of humor:

 

continuously

continuously

continuously

 

rejected

there are bigger blueprints

moving from nooks the size of grain

directly to scales of mountains and oceans ...

 

From title to finish, the religious/secular dichotomy is consistent, balanced, and played out well. The poem is also visually pleasing. As usual, well done.

 

Tony

[dr_con]

Perhaps I should ride the bus more often! :)

This part seems to say (with a bit of irony) that God has a sense of humor:

From title to finish, the religious/secular dichotomy is consistent, balanced, and played out well. The poem is also visually pleasing. As usual, well done.

 

Tony

 

Thanks for riding along Tony! I appreciate the feedback and appreciate your insight as always ;-) BTW I don't drive so Buses are my lot- the eternal Passenger ;-) Of course with peak oil and the other attendant problems of our modernity it makes me look like a progressive prophet;-)

 

DC

[Aleksandra]

As much as I read the more this poem, I like it better.

 

Wonderful essential poem Dr.Con. The title is very atrcative and captures the attention, and the poem offers a lot.

Thanks for sharing.

 

Aleksandra