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Larsen M. Callirhoe
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we talk, we walk without each other's reason.

We dream, we laugh side by side.

Adventures we do share in life.

The day I met you my heart

was filled with joy.

 

We run in circles

trying to please one another.

I lived in a zoo

till the day we met.

 

We can survive this world together.

Our eyes met and sparks flew.

Will I be the warrior you picture me as.

 

Sitting at the walls of heartache

I met you in my dreams one day.

We smiled without any style.

 

It is so hard to please you.

You didn't care as long

as I was beside you.

 

We dance, we laugh

the day we got married.

 

All our dreams did seem attainable.

Who would of figured it

would all end in a car accident.

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Posted

I like the title, Victor. :) And I especially like these parts:

 

We talk, we walk without each other's reason.

We dream, we laugh side by side.

Adventures we do share in life ...

 

We run in circles

trying to please one another.

I lived in a zoo

till the day we met ...

 

All our dreams did seem attainable.

Who would of figured it

would all end in a car accident.

I also like the poem's nostalgia, and how it ends with an ironic "Who would've thunk?"

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Larsen M. Callirhoe
Posted

hi tony im gigling and laughing at what i am about to write. i was gonna name it "mister and mistress callirhoe" lol. than i thought of what i did at who do i direct this toward but let the reader decide if i m a mister and she is a mistress. im laughin hard writing this. in all seriousness thanks for commenting tony,

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

Posted

Hi victor,

 

 

What sweet memories of a special love and time shared and how poignantly brief it was. You bring out the sadness of this asundering of relationship but the note of celebration of what it was balances this and gives the poem a sweet-bitterness:

 

We run in circles

trying to please one another.

I lived in a zoo

till the day we met.

 

Sitting at the walls of heartache

I met you in my dreams one day.

We smiled without any style.

 

....

All our dreams did seem attainable.

Who would of figured it

would all end in a car accident.

 

 

Very moving.

 

 

Thank you.

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

  • 2 weeks later...
Posted

Victor you are so nice :). You know how to brink something positive between sad poem, and it's wonderful how you keep your spirit up.

 

The poem is well written and yes let the reader to decide that what is not so hard to realize in this case :).

 

I like it how you wrote this poem.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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