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Another Dawn


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I just got back from the US to a city devastated by a powerful typhoon in four decades. I will try to catch up on my contributions and critics this week. I am still around :-)



Another dawn breaks. I rise to wait,

for this curtain that hides us

from each other, to be set aside.


As the light exposes the horizon

of our thoughts, it is my wish

not to see gloom blow over.


When one day you are restored

in your radiance, cleared of this fog

of uncertainty, I will welcome you,


walk with you, with joy

that belongs to pride of possession,

where I will see you in a new light,


your details, once again, clear, distinct,

your sanity, strong like pillars of steel,

unshaken by quakes nor dimmed by mist.


But winds of apathy has yet blown again,

coldness of heart is back, in your eyes-

but I will try again.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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A powerful reflection of the dyadic cyclone of 'realtionship.' The Metaphors are powerful and well executed. Nice, nice work.


Sorry to hear about the 'natural disaster' that since the US denies man's impact on Climate Change will remain a mysterious 'natural' force;-)




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The cyclone as a metaphor for the storm of emotions and relationship works well. You express the vulnerability well:


But winds of apathy has yet blown again,

coldness of heart is back, in your eyes-

but I will try again.



I hope things have settled a little after the cyclone. It has been in the news here along with the deadly earthquake we've had.




Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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I'm always amazed when people rebuild after devastating natural disasters. (I especially think of the fires, earthquakes, and landslides that often threaten California.) Obviously, in these cases, the will to remain in the home location must exceed the fear of the disasters' recurring. I'm not sure what I would do, move or stay put and rebuild. Good to read you, Joel.



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This is a good write Joel. Emotional and metaphorical. I like this one a lot.


I hope you and yours are fine and safe.


PS: Nice pics on fb.



The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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