Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted October 10, 2009 Share Posted October 10, 2009 (edited) A Flame, A Spark, A Fire Burning Somewhere our destinies were meant to be. Somewhere in times are hearts were meant to collide. Somewhere in this world our souls will unite. Someday I will walk hand in hand with you. Some were meant to sing the blues. Summer nights in the heat we make love. Imagine a night together, oh what a thrill. Don't sop believing for we will be together. This I promise you as the Sun is my witness. A flame a spark starts this fire within us. Time sets us free to be. The desire is overwhelming. I don't know where I will be tomorrow. So please stay with me now. So tomorrow doesn't come our way. Maybe yesteryear is all we once had. But now the moment is all we can share. Can't you feel the passion in my heart beating. Edited October 11, 2009 by Larsen M. Callirhoe Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted October 10, 2009 Share Posted October 10, 2009 Viktor, A solid clean write- stays on topic and conveys the sense of immediate passion. The first line has an error (?): Somewhere are destinies were meant to be Is the are possibly supposed to be 'our' ? Very much a love song. Thanks! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted October 11, 2009 Author Share Posted October 11, 2009 thanks for the comments DC. Much appreciated. You're correct. the word "are" is suppose to be "our". thanks for catching that. i seem to make that common mistake all the time. i even read the poem aloud and didn't catch it. i for some reason seem to make that word use incorrectly all the time. any suggestions to break that bad habbit. serriously, anyone? victor i will change it. thanks. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted October 11, 2009 Share Posted October 11, 2009 I like it! This could be a power ballad. It reminds me of my teenage years, especially time spent at the skating rink with Journey and Foreigner rocking the PA system. Time sets us free to be.The desire is overwhelming. Yes, it is ... Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted October 21, 2009 Share Posted October 21, 2009 Vic this is a nice love journey. I like it a lot. Sounds so good and sensitive. Good to read this. Thanks for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted October 21, 2009 Author Share Posted October 21, 2009 thanks alek and tony. hi alek facebook is addictive. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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