jondan Posted November 7, 2009 Share Posted November 7, 2009 Strolling Lovers We strolled along through Sefton Park, on a beautiful autumn morn. Clear blue skies, cold crisp air, beneath a golden sun. We talked. we laughed, stared into eyes, cuddled tight,to share our heat. Brushed our lips with steamy breath, those lips...tasting so sweet. Surrounded by colours of the fall, shades of Golden brown. Vibrant colours burst into life, leaves discarded on the ground. As we lingered. arm in arm, I felt happy with my life. Knowing I'd found my one true love, my friend, my lover, my wife. David T Smith copyright 6th October 2009 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted November 7, 2009 Share Posted November 7, 2009 The imagery in the first three verses reminds me a lot of the Joan Baez classic "Diamonds and Rust." The last verse makes it personal and heartwarming. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jondan Posted November 8, 2009 Author Share Posted November 8, 2009 The imagery in the first three verses reminds me a lot of the Joan Baez classic "Diamonds and Rust." The last verse makes it personal and heartwarming. Tony Hi Tony I will have to look this up, I don't know of any poets, as I have never read a poetry book before...Didn't do it where I am from if you wanted to keep your teeth LOL...Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted November 8, 2009 Share Posted November 8, 2009 Hi TonyI will have to look this up, I don't know of any poets, as I have never read a poetry book before... Didn't do it where I am from if you wanted to keep your teeth LOL...Dave Well, if you listened to "Diamonds and Rust," you would probably be okay.:)) It's actually an old folk song. The imagery in it is kind of "autumnal," yet a bit more bleak than your poem: Now I see you standing With brown leaves falling around And snow in your hair Now you're smiling out the window Of that crummy hotel Over Washington Square Our breath comes out white clouds Mingles and hangs in the air Speaking strictly for me We both could have died then and there (excerpt) Thanks, again, for capturing the season. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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