Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted January 31, 2010 Share Posted January 31, 2010 I'm glad to see ya around. its been a long long while. Tho the years have kept us apart your warm embrace is always welcomed here. I cried to sleep the day you left my side. Always wondered how'd you been coming around. Three angel-god sent children and a look of a mother on your face. Me I've been around. Written over a 100 short stories and over 500 poems to keep me busy. I moved to the mountains in November 1999. I am cold with out you as a friend in my life. God has shown you sorrow and given you three warm embraces. Glad to see you around. I'm happy after all we put one another thru we can still call each other friends. Yes time heals all wounds I guess there is a God after all. May this entity bless you, your husband, and your three lovely children. Me I'll get around. I always seem to somehow. It is cold outside and time for me to sip my coffee and send this to you my friend Joyce. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted February 3, 2010 Share Posted February 3, 2010 A poem of forgiveness and the impact of time- It demonstrates a maturation of your relationship to the subject and is well executed... There are a few misspellings and errors: kept up apart Kept us apart God as shown you sorrow God Has But I love the intention and the feeling of warm/cool acceptance... Well done, DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted February 4, 2010 Author Share Posted February 4, 2010 Hi dr con. You can ask Aleks about her making those corrections. I seem to be in a rutt. Im very ill. Aleks could you? I can't see to well and I am shaky. To type this memo was a chore. I soon might pass into the great unknown. The doctor I had looked nervous. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted February 5, 2010 Share Posted February 5, 2010 Always willing to help Victor dear. I am sorry for not catching up on time. I am worried about you and please be fine and may God help you. My prayers are with you my dear friend. Alek. Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 6, 2010 Share Posted February 6, 2010 This is quite good, Victor. The poem derives its strength from the conversational tone and how you balance various chronological events with the present: Me I've been around.Written over a 100 short stories and over 500 poems to keep me busy. I moved to the mountains in November 1999. I am cold with out you as a friend in my life. The narrator-poet's forgiveness is genuine, and there's a sense of peace and closure all the way around: It is cold outsideand time for me to sip my coffee and send this to you my friend Joyce. A perfect ending that seems to "say it all." This is truly one of your finest. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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