Tinker Posted February 12, 2010 Share Posted February 12, 2010 rust climbing steps to temple rusty knees complain while snow capped crown gracefully bows low in gratitude --Judi Van Gorder An old one revised, revision inspired by Brendan's Mono no Aware. Chinese genre xiaoshi Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted February 13, 2010 Share Posted February 13, 2010 Wow Tinker, this is short and powerful. When I saw the title I guessed that it must be some inspiration by Brendan's poem. I read what you wrote there about Japanese and saba or rust of time. That was inspiring for me. This poem captures with its own spirit and imagery. Thank you for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 13, 2010 Share Posted February 13, 2010 I think it captures the spirit of sabi, Tinker. As they say, rust never sleeps. We can only hope to outlast it. There's a wisdom in the "snow capped crown" that bears witness to this fact. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted February 13, 2010 Share Posted February 13, 2010 Tinker, A great little piece- pure description=pure emotion- well titled, well wrought just plain fun... Excellent Work! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted February 14, 2010 Share Posted February 14, 2010 Hi Tink, The spirit triumphs over the body is the sense I got. Thank you. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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