Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted March 2, 2010 Share Posted March 2, 2010 I hear you voice daydreaming in the twilight morning hours something tells my heart I don't need you anymore in my life. I wish for magic to tell me what to do. you made me a fool. only lovers carry this shame. living a lie oh what must i do but turn to a prayer to my god. up high. el elyon adoni god god most high lord what must i do to end these sleepless nights tossing and turning. living with you in my life carry me on a whisper and a lie. I hope for love like a fading dream that echoes in the dark cascading in the rising son. running rivers filled by my many tears but i don't cry no more. I found my faith by the cross of hope now god is on my side. I have joy that fills my life and my cup oerflows. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 2, 2010 Share Posted March 2, 2010 An interesting blend of lyric, lament, and psalm, Victor. I like the narrator's resolve -- oh what must i dobut turn to a prayer to my god. up high. el elyon adoni god god most high lord -- and his triumphant return from despair: but i don't cry no more. i found my faith by the cross of hope now god is on my side. i have joy that fills my life and my cup oerflows. I enjoyed this one more than once. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted March 3, 2010 Share Posted March 3, 2010 Hi Victor, I agree with Tony - there's a sense of emerging from the depths of despair into hope and light. There are many beautiful lines in your poem. These are particularly striking for the pathos and lyrical quality: running rivers filled by my many tears you made me a fool.only lovers carry this shame. Thank you. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted March 4, 2010 Share Posted March 4, 2010 Victor, this is very lyrical piece of poetry. I love how your verses flow and the imagery at the beginning. I am most happy that at the end the narrator expressed positive feeling. Happy to read you again, Victor. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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