Sitting down to write a poem

[dedalus]

Adrift on sad sultry morning beams, only

recently released from sulphurous slumber,

I made my weary, hunched and crooked way

dodging sundry other dull-eyed denizens

of this, the jaded metropolis. Of a sudden

what should instantly rise before me,

if not a vision of transcendent loveliness

and exquisite grace beyond compare?

 

Supressing all signs of astonishment,

I raised my hat in soul-benumbed salute

and refrained, in an excess of difficulty,

from casting myself down upon my knees

in homage to Aphrodite, Astarte, Athena,

Isis, Hecuba, Demeter, Eriu, Persephone,

and said, “My word, seems like a lovely day.”

“Yes,” they replied, “the rain is holding off.”

 

I staggered away, transfixed, dumbfounded,

My heart all tangled in turbid turmoil,

marking in a moment a clear and solemn resolve

that I would shortly, indubitably, involve my future

and fortune … with the Vision of Venus on the left.

 

Version 2:

 

I was walking down the street

when I met two birds and

politely said Hello; I later

married the one with the big ...

well, turns out they were fake,

but she's a jolly young thing and we knock along.

[dr_con]

Up way too early after a night of debauchery with my brother- and I must say that even pre-coffeee I laughed and smiled... A marvelous little demonstration of the theme and very clever...

 

DC&J

[waxwings]

I started from the top, and...what the heck, this is not daedalus. So I scroll down.... Aha, there is a poem. Wow!

 

Ellipsis to end a complete sentence requires four(4) periods. Jolly well fun delivered nicely.

Edited March 16, 2010 by waxwings

[tonyv]

I, too, smiled when I read this one, Brendan. The first part reads like "Composed upon Westminster Bridge, September 3, 1802." On the other hand, "Version 2" reads like the Brendan we know, love, and have become accustomed to. :) The contrast between the two accents the story's finer points.

 

Tony

[douglas]

yes indeed - lots of fun and some great lines and moments in this piece. thanks for sharing.