Making and Baking

[Frank E Gibbard]

Word on word I seek, and write a piece

 

In hope of worth in process of selection,

 

Nor that the poem be inimical to release,

 

But duly stands a test of close inspection.

 

 

 

As a baker wants his prized bread to rise

 

Then may a poet seek the perfect strophe,

 

In both crafts they need to act quite wise,

 

Make a crusty poem, compose a lusty loaf.

 

　

 

　

[dr_con]

Ah my favorite subset of poetry- poems about poetry... Made me smile- lifted my spirits and got a rise out of me...

 

No half baked by any means Frank!

 

DC&J

[Frank E Gibbard]

Ah my favorite subset of poetry- poems about poetry... Made me smile- lifted my spirits and got a rise out of me...

 

No half baked by any means Frank!

>>>> Well done I hoped, but modesty forbids DC, no more baking puns from me. Cheers,,, FRANK.

[Lake]

Love the comparison of making a poem and baking a bread, or baking a poem and making a bread.

 

The last line

 

Make a crusty poem, compose a lusty loaf.

 

is very tasty.

 

For some reason I read "Nor" as "Not" in the line "Nor that the poem be inimical to release"

 

Enjoyed the idea and thought in the poem.

 

Cheers,

 

Lake

[tonyv]

Fantastic metaphor, Frank. Both writing a poem and baking bread are challenging, rewarding tasks. (I think some people just make them look easy.)

 

What I like about your trope is that hint of an additional surprise ingredient -- the hope of peer approval:

 

Word on word I seek, and write a piece

 

In hope of worth in process of selection,

 

Nor that the poem be inimical to release,

 

But duly stands a test of close inspection.

The reference to natural selection is well placed.

 

This one's honest, the way a poem should be. The title fits, too.

 

Tony

[worm]

My focus is on how metaphor is applied naturally here, as water fluid from poet to baker. The second strophe rubs up the two, making an integrated part.

 

But duly stands a test of close inspection.

This is also true and encouraging, for every man has his hobby-horse, which is entirely a matter of choice/tastes.

 

I have a special liking for the phrasing and the middle rhyming, crusty/ lusty, prized/rise/ quite/wise, poet/strophe, poet/compose/loaf. Transferred epithet is well handled in crusty poem. The usage of ‘nor’ behind an assertive sentence is new to me. I’ve learnt.

 

Frank, your poem is a lusty loaf.

[Frank E Gibbard]

Thank you so much Xiao-zhen for your critique. I certainly appreciate the studious analysis you give our poetry. Frank

[Frank E Gibbard]

Love the comparison of making a poem and baking a bread, or baking a poem and making a bread.

 

 

 

Cheers, Lake.

[Frank E Gibbard]

Fantastic metaphor, Frank. Both writing a poem and baking bread are challenging, rewarding tasks.

This one's honest, the way a poem should be. The title fits, too.

 

Tony

 

I want to thank you Tony for the detailed appreciation you give our pieces and these comments. Frank