douglas Posted April 30, 2010 Share Posted April 30, 2010 (edited) this restlessness i must confess is taking me to a higher space your words your touch your beautiful face and the things you say that make me feel out of place and this earth is too full of images and thoughts all of those things that fill our minds and distort i'm trying so hard to make sense of this New World Order trying to make sense of what i ought to say and feel and display it seems that i never get that image right because thoughts move so fast and take flight within our minds our secret brains our desires and expressions and contemporary refrains this restlessness oh this restlessness can't you feel it now taking full control of you a restlessness to know and to love to be understood to experience sensuality and adoration to feel that which is true and the candle will burn releasing its flame and the heart will keep beating with a pulse that is just the same transforming what is dimensional and solid and real into something magical, otherworldly surreal. Edited October 24, 2011 by douglas Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted April 30, 2010 Share Posted April 30, 2010 Lovely sonics in this poem, Douglas. Especially noteworthy are all the "s" and "c" sounds throughout. ... and the things you saythat make me feel out of place ... i'm trying so hard to make sense of this New World Order trying to make sense of what i ought to say and feel and display ... Keep writing from the heart. You won't go wrong. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted May 4, 2010 Author Share Posted May 4, 2010 thank you very much for your comments tony! much appreciated! will spend more time soon reading and commenting on other's poems! just always in a rush these days! post the odd poem and write the odd comment when i can just to keep in touch! :) keep well! Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted May 4, 2010 Share Posted May 4, 2010 Douglas, for a rhyming rant- the lyrical sing song voice really work- a lovely reflection on love and being among the artifacts and objects of modernity... Nice! DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 16, 2010 Share Posted May 16, 2010 Well, I won't be modest and I will tell that I felt a little bit from the voice of Shakespeare, while I was reading this poem, especially this part here: this restlessnessoh this restlessness can't you feel it now taking full control of me it's a restlessness to know and to love to be understood I loved your poem, Doug. I enjoyed a lot. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted October 24, 2011 Author Share Posted October 24, 2011 thanks dr and alex - i've made a few tweaks and created stanzas which i think improve this poem a lot - busy getting my second book together and gathering some work from PMO Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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