poetjohncompton Posted June 15, 2010 Posted June 15, 2010 as she stepped through the mud wildflowers sprouted from her footprints. she smiled loose and unbalanced. Quote https://www.facebook.com/poetjohncompton
badger11 Posted June 16, 2010 Posted June 16, 2010 as she stepped through the mudwildflowers sprouted from her footprints. she smiled loose and unbalanced. I love to be surprised. Fresh and talented write. badge Quote
waxwings Posted June 17, 2010 Posted June 17, 2010 (edited) as she stepped through the mudwildflowers sprouted from her footprints. she smiled loose and unbalanced. I am enjoying this, but have some qualms about the intent of 'unbalanced'. Of several possibilities there is one that 'frightens' me. I wonder if my idea of how that could be avoided is wrong, but here goes: she smiled as she stepped through the mud wildflowers sprouted from her footprints, loose and unbalanced. I have a hard time assuming Mother is 'loose and unbalanced', but a 'loose and unbalanced smile' defies (my) comprehension. Would you elucidate? Edited June 25, 2010 by waxwings Quote
Aleksandra Posted July 9, 2010 Posted July 9, 2010 John, I agree with, badge - this is a fresh and talented write. I love your newest poems. Just keep writing ;). Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia
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