Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted June 26, 2010 Share Posted June 26, 2010 (edited) when your gone. somewhere in the night. i dream about you when you are gone. you are not by my side when i sleep alone at night. drifting apart ever lonely the tears streak down my face. we used to whisper to one another after making love. now here in the dark in my room all alone. when you are gone im so insecure. i dream about you. but like all dreams they fade away in the cold distance. and everytime i try to reconnect we grow ever so far apart. is this love i feel for you worth it on my end of the line. when your gone and you have left me for good it seems time is not on my side drifting apart in all eternity. and when i am gone you leave a flower by my grave. when we were young you would of shed a tear or two for me. but now that many years have passed us on by since you left me on a rainy day. you hav no solace or rememberance for me. only a word to your new family. he was a friend that stabbed me in the back and i wish for those memories of him were nothing but youthful ignorance. and i look down from above peace in my heart. nice memories but even i have moved on. a lover waits for me in another life destiny waits for me. and time passes on by but it seems to be only a second or two to the powers that be. and when it rains out life renews itself in a tear. then a new journey begins. the flowers bloom and i meet you on a windy day by the seaside and i am at peace forgetten my past. it was only a dream. Edited July 11, 2010 by Larsen M. Callirhoe Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 26, 2010 Share Posted June 26, 2010 The mention of "cold" distance strikes a chord, Victor: i dream about you.but like all dreams they fade away in the cold distance .... Distance -- literal and figurative -- works on several levels. It complements (and is amplified by) the sense of transcendence: and i look down from abovepeace in my heart. nice memories but even i have moved on .... a lover waits for me in another life .... Mesmerizing and, at the same time, heart wrenching -- I enjoyed it. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted June 30, 2010 Share Posted June 30, 2010 Expressive and direct. Personally I would find it difficult to have so many words in a poem, but then my style tends to edit down to the core. badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted July 9, 2010 Share Posted July 9, 2010 How much I enjoyed this poem, Victor. Very emotional and heartbreaking. The metaphors are included in the right places and give it its real sense. That's what makes this poem beautiful and melancholic. I like the bright side, the positive. I read this poem over and over. I loved it. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted July 10, 2010 Share Posted July 10, 2010 Hi victor, Melancholy and full of yearning. It flows like a dirge and yet you also inject a sense of going beyond such heartache and suffering. Beautiful! Thank you. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted July 11, 2010 Author Share Posted July 11, 2010 wow everyone thanks for the rave reviews. pride sets in. i guess i am starting to find a rythm. my older poems i seemed so immature and knew nothing on the poetry world. thanks for the journey my friends. i have a title for my writings, poetry, short stories, journals and letters it is called " Silver Chords" my two nephews will inherit my writings. i blessed both at birth to be my godsons. since i miss there lifes now they will see i had a beautiful heart in my writings. i have made peace finally i will be departing earth soon. i have seven years left my guardian angel barthawlamuel says. i will be given a crown of glory for overcoming death. only christ moses elijah and enoch have done this besides me. may angels be with you and know i have love you as christ jesus has. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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