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last snow - tanka

 

 

with mists

over the valley

my mind drifts

the last snow chills

prayer wheels are silent

 

 

 

Many thanks to Tink who pointed out the typo in last line: "prayer wheels" instead of prayer wheel" as in the first post.

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Ahamm... goldenlangur...

What I can say? Wonderful tanka again. Wonderful expressed. The last expression it is so not usual and I love it.

prayer wheel are silent

That line tells a lot, and explains the sense of the poem, and gives one wonderful end of this poem, like an answer of the drifted mind and when the last snow chills.

 

Much enjoyed

 

Thank you for sharing

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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goldenlangur

Thank you Aleksandra for your wonderful response. Your thought here is truly uplifting!:

 

aleksandra wrote:

an answer of the
drifted mind
and when
the last snow chills.

 

Aleksandra

 

 

Thank you very much,

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Such desolation in this one, Golden, especially in the stillness of the last lines:

the last snow chills

prayer wheel are silent.

All I can see are endless steppes. Unknown what lies beyond the horizon. Ominous.

 

Tony

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goldenlangur

Hi Tony,

 

My apologies for this late response to your considered reading of this tanka. Like you, the demands of my work do take their toll on writing!

 

I'm very grateful that wth the "desolation" you also sensed the "ominous" here.

 

 

Thank you for a rewarding review,

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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