goldenlangur Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 waiting waiting for your call - pigeons coo on a cable how eloquent! while you and I can’t find the time or words goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Wonderful poem golden. Look how nice sounds on the end: while you and Ican’t find the time or words ah that paradox in the life Thank you for sharing Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Hi Golden, It appears that the narrrator and the one to whom this is directed are physically apart. This is evident from the first line: waiting for your call - I like how you then go on to show that even lesser creatures, the cooing pigeons, are more human (for lack of a better word): they interact in an attentive social way. It does seem that some people or even couples are indeed too busy with other things and simply don't make time for one another. However, I am sure that there are others who are just stubborn and refuse to speak to one another because of some fight. Either way, life is definitely too short to avoid (or not speak to) a loved one. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted April 21, 2009 Author Share Posted April 21, 2009 "paradox" Hi Aleksandra, Yes, indeed a "paradox" and how we waste time and life! Thank you for the read. I'm grateful that you enjoyed this. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted April 21, 2009 Author Share Posted April 21, 2009 Your perceptive reading. Hi Tony, How well you read this! I enjoyed your reflections here very much: It does seem that some people or even couples are indeed too busy with other things and simply don't make time for one another. However, I am sure that there are others who are just stubborn and refuse to speak to one another because of some fight. Either way, life is definitely too short to avoid (or not speak to) a loved one. Tony Thank you very much. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Hi gl, Aleks and Tony have already expressed well some of the thoughts that came to me when reading this. I will add that although the human connection may be central to the message of the poem, it is the unique sound image, of "pigeons coo on a cable" that is savored and will be remembered by the reader. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 GL, I like the poignant melancholy of your poem. Pigeons cooing are especially an apt portrait of this. Thanks Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted April 21, 2009 Author Share Posted April 21, 2009 "sound image" Hi Tink, I'm very pleased that the "sound image" in the line you quoted, works for you. It does seem quite straightforward, while we fret and fume! Thank you very much, goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted April 21, 2009 Author Share Posted April 21, 2009 "poignant melancholy" Thank you JoelJosol for your thoughtful comment: ...the poignant melancholy of your poem. Pigeons cooing are especially an apt portrait of this. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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