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is the window open?

is that a draft from the moor,

a snake slithering beneath the tor,

under the door, across the floor?

should she switch on the bedside lamp?

 

And if she should

dare to whisper, to worm these walls,

scent a garden

with colour and light,

seek warmth from another?

 

that voice? like a flock of gulls

screaming for green and peace -

is that a lock unlocking?

what scurrying feet are fleeing

the clock? are those child's eyes?

 

And if she should pillow

this child, snuggle her warm

beneath the duvet,

like a swan

asleep in snow,

dreaming of rainbow flight...

 

who is she that smiles through the looking-glass?

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I like the way this feels. The first stanza is especially charming, and the others just a tad less. If anything, I wish could wish the sranzas would wane less as they approach the end. But look who is talking. The one who has as yet no ideas to support his complaints.

 

Thanks for the nice read, badge

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I like the way this feels. The first stanza is especially charming, and the others just a tad less. If anything, I wish could wish the sranzas would wane less as they approach the end. But look who is talking. The one who has as yet no ideas to support his complaints.

 

Thanks for the nice read, badge

 

Cheers WW. Yes, it does wane, but it was some 'fun' to write. I will probably play around with some more as usual :-8)

 

all the best

 

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is the window open?

is that a draft from the moor,

a snake slithering beneath the tor,

under the door, across the floor?

should she switch on the bedside lamp?

 

And if she should

dare to whisper, to worm these walls,

scent a garden

with colour and light,

seek warmth from another?

 

that voice? like a flock of gulls

screaming for green and peace -

is that a lock unlocking?

what scurrying feet are fleeing

the clock? are those child's eyes?

 

And if she should pillow

this child, snuggle her warm

beneath the duvet,

like a swan

asleep in snow,

dreaming of rainbow flight...

 

who is she that smiles through the looking-glass?

 

 

I really enjoyed the feel of this as I read it. Quite fascinating!

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Badger, this is very enjoyable poem to read and, I would like to hear YOU reading it. I loved the metaphors, I loved the expressions. All together works perfectly. The title is simple and gives a charm. The last line excites me. I must read this one again and again. Thank you for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Badger, this is very enjoyable poem to read and, I would like to hear YOU reading it. I loved the metaphors, I loved the expressions. All together works perfectly. The title is simple and gives a charm. The last line excites me. I must read this one again and again. Thank you for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

 

A mug of tea Aleks!? While enjoying a read... :-8)

 

We'll have to have an audio week-end get together soon.

 

Pleased it pleased.

 

badge :rolleyes:

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Wondrous fun! a lyrical pleasure that unwinds and rewinds through dreamlike poesy- fantastic!

 

Enjoyed mightily...

 

DC&J

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Wondrous fun! a lyrical pleasure that unwinds and rewinds through dreamlike poesy- fantastic!

 

Enjoyed mightily...

 

DC&J

 

A pleasure to have pleased.

 

cheers Dr c.

 

badge :rolleyes:

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A mug of tea Aleks!? While enjoying a read... :rolleyes:

 

We'll have to have an audio week-end get together soon.

 

Pleased it pleased.

 

badge :rolleyes:

 

 

Badge, it's just a cup of coffee :). And yes, I would love to. We can do that. I expect and hope to get soon a new computer and to do all the things that I'm missing to do, while I stress myself by using this "tractor" computer :D.

 

Have a good summer days!

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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This one gives me a sense of timelessness, for it makes no mention of any technology. Days gone by, today -- it makes no difference; the poem transcends time. I enjoyed the melody and the mystery, Badge.

 

Tony

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A mug of tea Aleks!? While enjoying a read... :rolleyes:

 

We'll have to have an audio week-end get together soon.

 

Pleased it pleased.

 

badge :rolleyes:

 

 

Badge, it's just a cup of coffee :) . And yes, I would love to. We can do that. I expect and hope to get soon a new computer and to do all the things that I'm missing to do, while I stress myself by using this "tractor" computer :D .

 

Have a good summer days!

 

Aleksandra

 

The coffee fix! Try a soothing camomile tea or perhaps a fennel and peppermint tead to de-tox :rolleyes:

 

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This one gives me a sense of timelessness, for it makes no mention of any technology. Days gone by, today -- it makes no difference; the poem transcends time. I enjoyed the melody and the mystery, Badge.

 

Tony

 

Thanks Tony. An indulgence by me, but pleased it worked for you in a way.

 

cheers

 

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Hi Badger, I love the sonics of this whimsical piece. Especially the sound and cadence of the first strophe. It was a strong opener but I didn't feel the following strophes were waning. The poem wouldn't have the same texture if the power of the opening cadence continued throughout. The warmth and love I felt from the last strophe was a beautiful conclusion.. So many dimensions to this one.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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Hi Badger, I love the sonics of this whimsical piece. Especially the sound and cadence of the first strophe. It was a strong opener but I didn't feel the following strophes were waning. The poem wouldn't have the same texture if the power of the opening cadence continued throughout. The warmth and love I felt from the last strophe was a beautiful conclusion.. So many dimensions to this one.

 

~~Tink

 

As always Tink your guidance is very much appreciated now and on many previous occasions. Means a lot that the poem's cadence was evident to the reader.

 

I'm pleased to see you have found time to progress your project too!

 

Hope all is well with you.

 

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

badge my sentiments exactly peppermint tea mixed with ginger tea now that is what i used to drink for stomachaches i have read some very good poems today and this is no exception i am forgetful now since my car accident. i have a very large vocabulary but can't spell lol. and someone stole my computer dictionary so i am upset. last week my parents went thru my stuff here and couldn't find it.

 

 

excellent write badge.

 

victor

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my sentiments exactly peppermint tea mixed with ginger tea now that is what i used to drink for stomachaches

 

Thanks Vic. Now that tea option is one I'll have to try!

 

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