Heaven On Earth

[fader]

My bag rattles loudly

 

As my cart rolls along

 

All of us are laughing

 

One breaks out in song

 

 

 

The sun is shining brightly

 

A soft wind stirs the trees

 

Giddy with excitement

 

We grab our balls, and tees

 

 

Who shall have first honors

 

To whip out his big stick

 

Smack that ball a long way

 

Give it, a real lick

 

 

I guess, I am the man

 

I whisper, "come on please"

 

Stay inside the fairway

 

Don't go into the trees

 

 

I let loose the power

 

Give it a mighty smack

 

A few seconds later

 

I hear a sudden crack

 

 

And then out of nowhere

 

The ball is flying back

 

We all dive for cover

 

Like we're under attack

 

 

Well you can imagine

 

The looks upon our faces

 

As we all stand back up

 

From our hiding places

 

 

Laughter breaks the silence

 

And they all look so pleased

 

For they weren't the first ones

 

On this day to get teased

Edited July 20, 2010 by fader

[tonyv]

So much for macho! :)) I enjoyed this lighthearted tale, Fader.

 

Tony

[Tinker]

Hi Fader, This is a fun read. I like the cadence and touch of rhyme which gives this narrative a light touch. Nice.

 

~~Tink

[RHommel]

Oh yes! This made me giggle as I remembered my father's ability to never take himself too seriously, especially when it came to golf... thanks for this fun piece!

 

~Rachel

[Frank E Gibbard]

As an ex-golfer (ex-everything these days) I enjoyed particularly liked your style fader. A slice (golf term) of life funnily told, as I said elsewhere - delightful.

Edited July 28, 2010 by Frank E Gibbard

[Aleksandra]

Hi, Rob. I read this and I see how much I missed your poetry, as well. It's always good to read such enjoyable piece. Well done, my friend.

 

Aleksandra

[dr_con]

An enjoyable romp and scene! well done, well played! ;-)

 

DC&J

[Lake]

There's a lot of fun here, fader. This could be a very good poem for children and you are a good children's poetry writer.

 

Glad to read you here and thanks for your comment on my poem.

 

Lake