fader Posted July 20, 2010 Share Posted July 20, 2010 (edited) My bag rattles loudly As my cart rolls along All of us are laughing One breaks out in song The sun is shining brightly A soft wind stirs the trees Giddy with excitement We grab our balls, and tees Who shall have first honors To whip out his big stick Smack that ball a long way Give it, a real lick I guess, I am the man I whisper, "come on please" Stay inside the fairway Don't go into the trees I let loose the power Give it a mighty smack A few seconds later I hear a sudden crack And then out of nowhere The ball is flying back We all dive for cover Like we're under attack Well you can imagine The looks upon our faces As we all stand back up From our hiding places Laughter breaks the silence And they all look so pleased For they weren't the first ones On this day to get teased Edited July 20, 2010 by fader Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted July 24, 2010 Share Posted July 24, 2010 So much for macho! :)) I enjoyed this lighthearted tale, Fader. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted July 27, 2010 Share Posted July 27, 2010 Hi Fader, This is a fun read. I like the cadence and touch of rhyme which gives this narrative a light touch. Nice. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RHommel Posted July 28, 2010 Share Posted July 28, 2010 Oh yes! This made me giggle as I remembered my father's ability to never take himself too seriously, especially when it came to golf... thanks for this fun piece! ~Rachel Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted July 28, 2010 Share Posted July 28, 2010 (edited) As an ex-golfer (ex-everything these days) I enjoyed particularly liked your style fader. A slice (golf term) of life funnily told, as I said elsewhere - delightful. Edited July 28, 2010 by Frank E Gibbard Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted July 28, 2010 Share Posted July 28, 2010 Hi, Rob. I read this and I see how much I missed your poetry, as well. It's always good to read such enjoyable piece. Well done, my friend. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 28, 2010 Share Posted July 28, 2010 An enjoyable romp and scene! well done, well played! ;-) DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted July 29, 2010 Share Posted July 29, 2010 There's a lot of fun here, fader. This could be a very good poem for children and you are a good children's poetry writer. Glad to read you here and thanks for your comment on my poem. Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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