dr_con Posted July 31, 2010 Share Posted July 31, 2010 Illusory Shores She sells sea shells on the sea shore- Diction Pronunciation Phonics Resonance lost in this maze of language always pointing the wrong way-not deliberately by any means considered ruminated or sensed the eternal lie buried beneath any claim to truth a simple gesture creates distortion this flower that rock a solitary birth or the bleak pronouncement- We cleared wreckage and bodies quickly it is almost done-Said pridefully and yet what option was there but this innocence this return without preference or value clouding a necessary response to the unbearable a singular burst of compassion. wreckage and bodies Naked drunk alone weeping What a miserable glorious way to express this infinite love Seeing living as broken statues in need of fixing wounded healers all One voice alone in this wreckage crying I am lost the only sound that keeps our hearts beating- The tender drum wakes us from dream helps make the coffee causes the mourning dove’s coo This compassion born from necessity replies- Listen fiercely to the call. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted August 2, 2010 Share Posted August 2, 2010 I have wondered if compassion is an instinct. Perhaps the reward is acceptance and the safety of a social group. Either way it is a need as well as a conscious moral decision. badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted August 2, 2010 Share Posted August 2, 2010 The first reads like getting what one wishes for; the second is like the aftermath, a lone cry in the wilderness. I like how the two poems complement each other, how you included both. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frank E Gibbard Posted August 2, 2010 Share Posted August 2, 2010 Hi Doc, I may not have commented on the recent series but wonder at the fertile imagination exhibited, trenchant production like a tap, or oil gush but beneficial. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted August 3, 2010 Author Share Posted August 3, 2010 Thanks to you all-more soonish! ;-) DC&J BTW- the first piece will be completely re- writen- I'm not happy with it and I don't believe most are- when the series is done in the raw....;-) Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted August 6, 2010 Share Posted August 6, 2010 Hi DC, I could be mistaken in my reading here. I read the way you've placed the two poems as a kind of examining the contrasting different approaches to the creative art. In the first poem, you detail the artiste's awareness and indeed use of tools of the art. I though there's a wonderful irony that the artiste labors under all these mechanics and knowledge to convey or communicate something quite fundamental as compassion. The question that arose for me is: Can compassion be borne out of such means? In the second poem you have the rawness of feelings, physical experience and the classic image of an artiste's solitary search and loneliness of spirit. It seems to me that these are both extremes in the creative search and execution of art. There is a sense of reaching a plateau in the creative endeavor but you end on quite an impassioned note, that all is not lost. I love this haunting imagery: ... The tender drumwakes us from dream ... Even if I am off the mark here, thank you for a stimulating and thought-provoking read. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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