summayya Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 Euphrates Shall we talk about the ghosts of seasons and ages which wander among us, stirring our quiescent memories? Or remain and listen to the sedge: O birds alighted at the darkening trees, hold the axle hard! Hold it hard! The bank has never been fuller; even the sun sweats— Lo, it sets. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 Summayya , very beautiful written poem. Amazing sense of expressing here. Very sensitive and deep. Here you did so well job: Shall we talk about the ghosts of seasons and ages which wander among us, stirring our quiescent memories? Or remain and listen to the sedge: Very well done Summayya. Thank you for sharing I really missed your voice Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 Hi summayya, Your imagery in this poem truly made me feel like I was near the bank of this great ancient river that I have read about so many times but never had a feel for before now. Thank you. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
summayya Posted May 10, 2009 Author Share Posted May 10, 2009 Thanks both of you. Your readings and comments are much appreciated! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 I love the lyrical qualities of the last lines: summayya wrote: O birds alighted at the darkening trees, hold the axle hard! Hold it hard! The bank has never been fuller; even the sun sweats— Lo, it sets. An enjoyable read. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 I agree with Tony here. The sedge's appeal to contain the river. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 summayya, Very passionate write. Though the exclamation of "O" and "Lo" seem like old usage, they suit this poem well. One thing I am not quite sure is "axle". Is it a spindle? I start to like your poems more and more. Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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