Tinker Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Solitaire Red Six on black Seven, Jack on Queen, spades line up, Ace, Two, Three, Four. Another, diamonds this time, breathing in rhythm with the numbers. The click-click of the cards is the pulse. Pupils scan, register red hearts, black clubs, parts of a regulated whole. Chaos abated, order restored. ~~Judi Van Gorder Solitaire (original) Red four on black five, Jack on Queen, spades line up, Ace, two, three, four, another, diamonds this time, I breathe in rhythm with the numbers. The click of the cards is my pulse, pupils scan registering red hearts, black clubs, parts of a regulated whole. Chaos is abated, order restored. --- Judi Van Gorder Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Tinker, this is fantastic! The way the player is immersed in the game, both mentally and physically, is built into the rythm of the poem: Red four on black five,Jack on Queen, spades line up, Ace, two, three, four, another, diamonds this time, I breathe in rhythm with the numbers. The click of the cards is my pulse, pupils scan registering red hearts, black clubs, parts of a regulated whole. Chaos is abated, order restored. Yes, the cards are a part of the regulated whole -- the game -- but it's almost as if the player and the game are one, managing chaos until order is restored. Very impressive! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Hi Tink, It's amazing how you used a game of cards to create this lovely poem - the colours, images and the sounds make it flow well and then you inject a sense of purpose to crown it all! I enjoyed this very much. goldenalngur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 21, 2009 Author Share Posted April 21, 2009 Thank you Tony, Its a form of meditation. If I become one with the cards, that is the goal, becoming one with your surroundings. :D Hi gl, Thank you, admittedly a couple of fast games of Solitaire and my jumbled mind becomes clear. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 Tink, this is very clever written poem, I like it so much. And yes card games can be metaphor for life, thats for sure :) . So your poem is very well expressed and created. Thank you for sharing. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted April 21, 2009 Author Share Posted April 21, 2009 Thanks aleks, Metaphor is something I have not always been successful with. I appreciate your comment. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 21, 2009 Share Posted April 21, 2009 The last two lines were a surprise for me, Tink. I play solitaire as well. Made me read the poem again. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted June 10, 2018 Author Share Posted June 10, 2018 Solitaire Red Six on black Seven, Jack on Queen,spades line up, Ace,Two, Three, Four.Another, diamonds this time,breathing in rhythmwith the numbers.The click-click, slap of the cards is the pulse. Pupils scan,register red hearts, black clubs,parts of a regulated whole.Chaos abated, order restored. ~~Judi Van Gorder rewrite Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted June 10, 2018 Share Posted June 10, 2018 This was always one of my favorites, and I'm pleased to enjoy the reboot. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted June 24, 2018 Share Posted June 24, 2018 Order restored. I loved that. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted June 25, 2018 Author Share Posted June 25, 2018 Haha, it is the OCD in me. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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