dr_con Posted September 4, 2010 Share Posted September 4, 2010 everyone will be my love The threads of traffic on the morning news weave a landscape quilts of modernity since I don’t drive I sit transfixed bound to the unmapped spaces between what is seen what is forgotten and unfelt My Father has a new family An old road warrior driving hours to reach relatives a fishing spot or on vacation as opposed to the daily occupation of work and necessary commutes In my rebellion standing in the boat protecting my brother from predictable road hazards castrating the frustration of living with disappointment long hours in an escape car running from his parents the cold logic of capitalism and dissatisfaction I vowed never to become my Dad his favorite story told in endless loops of highways winding West becoming a forest ranger for a summer drink and guns firefighting with nights spent in a smoldering redwood all the tastes forbidden by his strict puritan mother and his Methodist father He has mellowed and moved on Found a woman opposite from my mother has a stepson who embraces corporate life justifies his lifestyle as a chemical engineer in big oil and rather than a half-wild garden he landscapes with tasteful choices Like him my rebellion becomes predictable A road sign flashing by 46 seconds And another billboard appears creating other curbed boundaries between civilization and wilderness All memories of him behind the wheel come from that time when he was my age now. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted September 5, 2010 Share Posted September 5, 2010 Hi DC, As usual I read your poems several times before they start to reveal themselves to me. Your work is complex, with many layers. This was an interesting revelation about your relationship with you father. I felt your father was someone from my world and I probably related to him more easily than you do. I liked how you ended one strphe with the beginning line of the next pulling me along deeper into your road trip. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted September 5, 2010 Share Posted September 5, 2010 Juris, I enjoyed this intensely personal, introspective poem. Hmmm ... An old road warriordriving hours to reach relatives a fishing spot or on vacation as opposed to the daily occupation of work and necessary commutes ... Sounds a bit like me. Sans the war stories, of course: ... my Dadhis favorite story told in endless loops of highways winding West becoming a forest ranger for a summer drink and guns firefighting with nights spent in a smoldering redwood all the tastes forbidden by his strict puritan mother and his Methodist father He has mellowed and moved on Found a woman opposite from my mother ... How well expressed! I can't even call it a loss of ideal; it's more like growing up. And I understand it. As for this -- A road sign flashing by46 seconds And another billboard appears creating other curbed boundaries between civilization and wilderness All memories of him behind the wheel come from that time when he was my age now. -- I can say I've felt it before. I loved this one. Good to see you again. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted September 5, 2010 Author Share Posted September 5, 2010 Tinker, Tony been out of the 'loop' for awhile- appreciate your perceptive feedback and your generous comments- will try to catch up soon! Much Grace, DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted September 16, 2010 Share Posted September 16, 2010 Hi dr_con, I think S1 is a great opener. At first read I didn't quite get the last line of each stanza, but after reading Tinker's comment "the beginning line of the next", it makes much more sense to me now. The title "everyone will be my love", rather than "everyone is my love" hints that you're working towards making everyone your love? It's always nice to read something about the poet's life. Enjoyed, Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted September 18, 2010 Author Share Posted September 18, 2010 Thanks Lake! Well, honestly the title is taken from the piece before this, but it occurred to me as the most honest way to describe the impulse when growing up to succeed... The desire later morphed into many forms to be loved and liked- How one goes about it of course, is the unique but familiar tale;-) DC&J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted October 8, 2010 Share Posted October 8, 2010 Juris, I like how in your poems the narrator stays almost always the same. This was a nice composition, and an interesting perspective of view. Good to read this one. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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