dr_con Posted September 7, 2010 Posted September 7, 2010 (edited) spacesbetween Gate One Watching the Corpse Transient workers from across the globe washed up on brutal Alaskan shores waiting for the pink gold run to dissect a living Tents among the cannery gravel pits time spent hustling communing between layers of marijuana alcohol the eternal party underneath the heavy un-mythable gaze of volcanic mountains- their solidity and reality makes ours uncertain far from taught homes acceptable conversations ---------------------Why did the bosses come looking to hire only on mornings when the party had gone so well ------------the Dark inside was greater than the summer twilight ----------------reduced to meat machines without past or ambition called to clean haul and preserve endless tons of salmon entombed flesh giving life all along the Pacific Rim Gate Two The One who Watches the Corpse A friend called me a Stunning Collection of Habits My addiction to addiction my need to help to be a father while inside my mother speaks loudly she’s harder to reach but no less hungry- Many of my ancestors were fishermen honest workers lime kiln owners and military men farmers and their wives passing down through the generations ever increasing expectations Children mocked me when I told them Mary Queen of the Scots was part of my lineage afraid I’d abandon the common ground of secondary roles become a prophet or a messiah claim some sort of divinity out of history’s loam- the transubstantiation of dirt into soil Our complicity in these lies still hurts Gate Three Stripping the Corpse I had friends who couldn’t eat cut tomatoes with bloodred insides raw undone They taught me the beauty of a rare steak- just warmed blood mixing freely with starch and coddled eggs---------------I have known poets who see only imperfection revolted by the vagrancy of form This practice of a lifetime still ends in death Between muscle sinew and bone a knife can still cut when wielded by one who has practiced slicing the gap between honest----truth. Edited September 7, 2010 by dr_con Quote thegateless.org
tonyv Posted September 8, 2010 Posted September 8, 2010 I enjoyed the Arctic/Pacific Northwest setting and imagery: Transient workers from across the globewashed up on brutal Alaskan shores waiting for the pink gold run to dissect a living Tents among the cannery gravel pits time spent hustling communing between layers of marijuana alcohol the eternal party underneath the heavy un-mythable gaze of volcanic mountains- their solidity and reality makes ours uncertain far from taught homes acceptable conversations ... without past or ambition called to clean haul and preserve endless tons of salmon entombed flesh giving life all along the Pacific Rim ... and how you introduced the human equation into it with particular attention to the evolving role of the matriarchs: ---------------------Why did the bosses come looking to hireonly on mornings when the party had gone so well ------------the Dark inside was greater than the summer twilight ----------------reduced to meat machines ... Many of my ancestors were fishermen honest workers lime kiln owners and military men farmers and their wives passing down through the generations ever increasing expectations ... [emphasis mine] From all of it I get a sense of "everything changes yet everything stays the same." For despite technology, primitiveness still takes first chair: I had friends who couldn’t eat cut tomatoes with bloodred insides raw undoneThey taught me the beauty of a rare steak- just warmed blood mixing freely with starch and coddled eggs ... The "spacebetween" the words in the last line effectively drives the point home: This practice of a lifetime still ends in death Between muscle sinew and bone a knife can still cut when wielded by one who has practiced slicing the gap between honest----truth. Honest ... truth ... paradox. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
dr_con Posted September 18, 2010 Author Posted September 18, 2010 Thank You Tony for your penetrating insight- special thanks for helping me get this posted in its 'form.' ! :D Of course, the end is a paradox, but one which quickly dissolves when one reflects on the times of honesty which somehow still covered the 'truth.';-) DC&J Quote thegateless.org
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