JoelJosol Posted September 23, 2010 Posted September 23, 2010 (edited) I will not give away that this is a love poem. Run it through a search engine but you will not find a lover's vocabulary in it. You'll be puzzled, disappointed and confused: lovelorn. The lines are deliberate to lead you on, to raise the hope that it is here somewhere. But, it is like courtship where the thrill is in the chase. The rule remains- haste makes waste. Stare at it long. You might chance to catch a glance, quick, elusive, intermittent. Be smitten with written words promising bonding with page. Maybe if the wonder remains, give me a second look. Edited September 27, 2010 by JoelJosol Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
Lake Posted September 23, 2010 Posted September 23, 2010 Hi Joel, Your lines indeed keep me interested in reading to find out what a love poem it is about. The tone is persuasive. Regards, Lake Quote
badger11 Posted September 24, 2010 Posted September 24, 2010 I will not give away that this is a love poem. The lines are deliberate to lead you on, to raise These lines are so good it is a challenge for the rest of the poem. badge Quote
rumisong Posted September 24, 2010 Posted September 24, 2010 I thought this was truly GREAT- My favorite of yours so far Joel just my sort of thing! Quote
tonyv Posted September 25, 2010 Posted September 25, 2010 Agree with the others, Joel. This is excellent. As Lake said, it's persuasive. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
JoelJosol Posted September 27, 2010 Author Posted September 27, 2010 Thanks guys. It's a playful poem. I'm glad you liked it. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
Tinker Posted October 1, 2010 Posted October 1, 2010 Hi Joel, I love how this piece leads me randomly through a maze that is so like life and love itself. Not the rush and romance we associate with love poems but the grit of loving and living and being. I always am impressed with the rhythmic flow of your words and the seemingly ease with which you write. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
JoelJosol Posted October 4, 2010 Author Posted October 4, 2010 Thanks, Tink. Sometimes the words just come and I try to find a structure. But, sometimes the structure comes first and I struggle to find the words to put in. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
dr_con Posted October 4, 2010 Posted October 4, 2010 Really a very clever, very resonant piece- thoroughly enjoyed the self-reflective, modernist approach to a very old theme- really a treat agree with the others a little masterpiece! Thanks JJ! DC&J Quote thegateless.org
JoelJosol Posted October 6, 2010 Author Posted October 6, 2010 You are very generous, DC! Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach
Aleksandra Posted October 9, 2010 Posted October 9, 2010 Indeed it's a playful poem, Joel. Good structure and good words. Good composed. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia
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