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head to head, we lie

under a cerulean sky

when did we last feel carefree?

ransacking our father's drinks

and stealing the King’s walnuts!

 

 

 

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

very different than usual - this is deep, but much more opened. I like it GL.

Have you ever planed to publish some tanka - book ? Or already you have?

 

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The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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goldenlangur

Hello Aleksandra,

 

So glad that you like the lighter tone in this tanka. icon_biggrin.png

 

Publish a book of tanka - now there's a thought and a dream icon_wink.gif I wish I would have the courage to pursue.

 

Thank you very much,

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

goldenlangur wrote:

 

Publish a book of tanka - now there's a thought and a dream
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I wish I would have the
courage
to pursue.

 

Ah goldenlangur, if is that only what you need , you have it. I am giving to you, I am supporting you and I am sure the others too.

 

Why not, you are so good with tankas. I would love to have a tanka - poetry in my hands by goldenlangur

 

Good luck my friend icon_wink.gif

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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goldenlangur

You're very kind Aleksandra.

 

I'm touched and encouraged.

 

 

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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I like the surprise rhyme that shows up in the first lines:

 

head to head, we lie

under a cerulean sky

 

 

when did we last feel carefree?

 

 

If only I could remember ...

 

I like how you then go on (even in this short tanka) to give two examples alluding to youth --

 

ransacking our father's drinks

and stealing the King's walnuts!

 

Sometimes I want to go back, sometimes I don't.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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goldenlangur

Hi Tony,

 

 

You make a very good point here:

 

tonyv wrote:

I like the surprise rhyme that shows up in the first lines...

Tony

 

It seems rhymes were used in tanka and even haiku - not as a regular rhyme scheme but a couple of lines, sometimes. Kenneth Yasuda discusses this aspect in detail.

 

Thank you very much for your perceptive reading. Not only your work but your reviews grow in depth and range.

But you're right - not all memories are worth recalling!

 

Thank you very much,

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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