Rumi and Me

[poetjohncompton]

when I die,

so I'll taste the rain,

lay me face up in a ditch

[Aleksandra]

Very interesting lines and title itself is so much eruptive.

I like it a lot. Deep...

 

Aleksandra

[douglas]

how nice to read yopu again mp! hope you are doing well! i enjoyed this poem. it's dark, esoteric and mystical. brief and emotive. it conjures up strong images and provokes thought. nice!

[badger11]

when I die,

so I'll taste the rain,

lay me face up in a ditch

 

captures how you experience life, in a sense the thread cannot be broken

 

hope all is well

 

badge

[JoelJosol]

At first glance, the association of rain and ditch and death made me think of "dead in the water", a state of nothingness, no progress towards anything.

 

But, I checked out Rumi. If my reading is correct, this is Jalaluddin Rumi, the Persian poet and mystic. Then, it alludes to the return of the "reed" back to its roots.

[waxwings]

when I die,

so I'll taste the rain,

lay me face up in a ditch

 

You might have noticed I am the guy who wishes poets would use 'normal' everyday English to insure their readers would think of them as competent writers in any genre.

 

I believe the title should be "Rumi and I". The question of using "me" or "I" has lmg been a sore point for literate people. Of course, it depends whether your title is to say "Rumi and I agree" or "They were looking for Rumi and me."

 

The poem is a neat one, but, in everyday English" you and I would be more likely to write the 3rd line before the 2nd line because, in this case, you want to be laid face up so that you can then taste the rain rather than the mud.

Edited November 3, 2010 by waxwings