JoelJosol Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 He has never done this- trusting her memory that when her wings get tired from wandering and she looks down to see these houses and recognize this nest she will choose to land. The distinct sound of her wings, whistling, confirms her reprise. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 Joel the poem is simply beautiful. It is so metaphorical and I love the metaphors what you use. trusting her memory that when her wings get tired from wandering and she looks down to see these houses and recognize this nest she will choose to land. That sounds so poetical and so touching. Thank you a lot for sharing this. Well done my friend Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 10, 2009 Author Share Posted May 10, 2009 I am glad you liked it, Sandra. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 Hello JoelJoso, I like the way this poem shows, suggests but does not tell. There's an element of hope tinged with misgiving that perhaps whatever reconciliation, "he" anticipates might not be without its "price", as it were. Your use of the detail "reprise" is quite teasing here. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 10, 2009 Author Share Posted May 10, 2009 Thank you, GL. This was built of my knowledge of pigeons. This piece was actually inspired by Mourning doves. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 10, 2009 Share Posted May 10, 2009 This poem moves along very smoothly with your linebreaks, enjambment and two-line stanzas. I see more in this than pigeons -- ... when her wings get tired from wandering ... Even the title is close to "Home." Very beautiful, Joel. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 10, 2009 Author Share Posted May 10, 2009 You're right, Tony. This is more than just about pigeons :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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