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Baneen Rua ( woman child of the auburn hair)


dedalus

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A hug and a squeeze

was the timid best that we could do.

I wish, dear Mary, I had possessed you,

vigorously, up in your parents' bedroom,

when you and I were seventeen.

My life and yours would have changed entirely.

 

A thousand autumns have passed

and at the funeral bash this summer ( a family thing)

I was told you still had feelings.

 

My heart fell apart in smithereens,

thoughts of a life back home in Ireland and of all the things

that could have been.

Edited by dedalus

Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

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I can share the sentiment of having to leave the down-home girl behind. Not the love of one's life, but the inkling of what we dream about before we learn what reality is like.

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Hi, Bren. I like the tone of this poem - the sadness and nostalgia and a touch of grief. I liked this poem, a lot.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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This reads very smoothly with a clever use of in line/end line rhyme and assonance, giving strength to the wistful theme. I particularly liked the last stanza “smithereens/ all the things”. Benjamin

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