goldenlangur Posted December 15, 2010 Share Posted December 15, 2010 (edited) Diabolic Possibility Raw silk curtains swing between trees. The sky is webbed with faces some half-formed, some scrawled in scream. Voices rise in mists curl in and out of un-glassed window. A song full of holes spills past the un-hinged door into the shadow of the half-dark. Her caul of silence is rent, in a trail of blood-scent she smears the earth, the sea, the peaks. Eyes of a violet moon weep, incessant rain rinses the night into a hurried dawn. A pallid sun hangs limp out pierced by the gloom of dreams Edited December 28, 2010 by goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 16, 2010 Share Posted December 16, 2010 Diabolical, it is, Goldenlangur. I love A song full of holesspills past the un-hinged door into the shadow of the half-dark. and "Her caul of silence is rent." In any case, I'm relieved it was only a dream! Tony :) Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 16, 2010 Share Posted December 16, 2010 (edited) "A song full of holes spills past the un-hinged door into the shadow of the half-dark." Particularly appeals to the musician in me. Enjoyed the atmospheric imagery. Benjamin. Edited December 16, 2010 by Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted December 17, 2010 Share Posted December 17, 2010 In any case, I'm relieved it was only a dream! hi gl, I'd delete the references to 'dream' and so take out that relief! Why deflate the reality of a nightmare? 'webbed with faces' especially conjured up the scene, and 'scrawled with scream' brought to mind Munch. A poem to haunt the day! 'enjoyed' badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted December 28, 2010 Author Share Posted December 28, 2010 Hi Tony, Thank you for reading this and I am glad too that dreams like this come once in a while: ;) Diabolical, it is, Goldenlangur. ... In any case, I'm relieved it was only a dream! Tony :) Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted December 28, 2010 Author Share Posted December 28, 2010 Particularly appeals to the musician in me. Enjoyed the atmospheric imagery. Benjamin. So glad that you enjoyed the rhythm here, Benjamin. By the way, if you don't mind my asking what kind music do you play? :D Thank you for the read. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted December 28, 2010 Author Share Posted December 28, 2010 I'd delete the references to 'dream' and so take out that relief! Why deflate the reality of a nightmare? 'enjoyed' badge I've taken on board your advice, badge and deleted the 'dream' in the title. :D I do like your reference to Munch's painting: 'webbed with faces' especially conjured up the scene, and 'scrawled with scream' brought to mind Munch. A poem to haunt the day! My own reference here is much more humble. Temples of the local warrior guardian deities have heads with contorted mouths which are quite vividly painted. I learn much from such comparisons that readers like you make. Many thanks. Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 29, 2010 Share Posted December 29, 2010 Particularly appeals to the musician in me. Enjoyed the atmospheric imagery. Benjamin. So glad that you enjoyed the rhythm here, Benjamin. By the way, if you don't mind my asking what kind music do you play? :D Thank you for the read. Sorry for the delay in responding. To answer your question: I play anything from contemporary songs, folk, blues through to jazz. I've even played in a six piece band providing choreographed music for exhibition dancers, who perform American Appalachian step dancing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted January 9, 2011 Share Posted January 9, 2011 What an exciting poem, Goldenlangur. I loved the scenes, the unusual and unique expressions, the setting, and the mood in this poem. The transforming of the verses is very smooth. I can not decide which stanza is my favorite, because all of them are striking and very powerful. This is a wonderful poem and a perfectly expressed work of art. It really does remind one of Munch's art. Thank you for sharing it. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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