Summer Heat

[JoelJosol]

I bear sunlight like a weight,

forcing sweat from forehead,

brows and armpits,

drenching the shirt

 

just as I see your hair

unfurl like a flag in the wind,

your face unflinching

in the heat,

 

and you

heading my way,

boosting up the heat

to a melting point

 

nearly vaporizing me

off the concrete.

[Aleksandra]

just as I see your hair

unfurl like a flag in the wind,

your face unflinching

in the heat,

 

Wonderful verse Joel.

 

The poem is so nice, I like it a lot. The last lines, the last part gives another dimension of the poem. Very good metaphor Joel . Very clever expressed.

 

Aleksandra

[summayya]

Nicely done JJ.

[JoelJosol]

Thank you, Aleks and summaya. I'm glad that you enjoyed this one. It's summer this side of the planet.

[tonyv]

I like your similies in this one, Joel --

I bear sunlight like a weight...

and

just as I see your hair

unfurl like a flag in the wind ....

 

JoelJosol wrote:

It's summer this side of the planet.

Now that is inspiring! Great title, too, Joel.

[Bloodyday]

This is the sunshine mock at my face

i lost the game in every single sense!

Now watching my world upside down

i having nothing to do, but feel alone!

 

 

great!

[goldenlangur]

Hi JoelJosol,

 

In a myriad of images you show the presence of summer. I like how you've personified the season with a strong element of confidence and impact.

 

goldenlangur