Tinker Posted January 16, 2011 Share Posted January 16, 2011 The Will I read of love, undying love, what does that mean, undying love? A rose withers, a blossom falls,--------------- what lives will die. Love is a will, a rush, a sigh, a touch, a cry, a hope, a rock. I read of love, undying love,--------------- what lives will die. Blush of new love we know must fade replaced in time with trust and grace. In rest, I will my love remain.-------------- What lives will die.---------------------- --Judi Van Gorder A Baccresiezé Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted January 17, 2011 Share Posted January 17, 2011 Hi Tink. A pensive and enjoyable poem. It has an aura of traditional song about it where constancy was valued greatly. Especially enjoyed the last stanza. Benjamin Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted January 17, 2011 Share Posted January 17, 2011 The Will I read of love, undying love, what does that mean, undying love? A rose withers, a blossom falls, --------------- what lives will die. Love is a will, a rush, a sigh, a touch, a cry, a hope, a rock. I read of love, undying love, --------------- what lives will die. Blush of new love we know must fade replaced in time with trust and grace. In rest, I will my love remain. -------------- What lives will die. ---------------------- --Judi Van Gorder A Baccresiezé Pleasing to read Tink with its musicality, the themes familiar and timeless, though the use of 'The Will' was an unusual metaphysical touch as a bequest of love. Love is a will, a rush, a sigh,a touch, a cry, a hope, a rock. The placement of 'rock' seemed to crystallise the transience of the 'moment'. enjoyed badge Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 21, 2011 Share Posted January 21, 2011 Very nice, Tinker! When I went to the reference section and saw that this was a syllabic invented form, I wasn't sure I would like it. Well, as it turns out, I don't. I love it. :) I enjoyed the carefully placed repetition in yet another well-executed "example" poem. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted January 22, 2011 Author Share Posted January 22, 2011 Hi Benjamin, Thanks for reading this. I thought the same thing, the form seems to create a traditional lyrics like sound. I appreciate your commenting. Hi Badger, Your thoughtful reading is always appreciated. "Love is a will." was said to me by a priest a long time ago when he was preping me for marriage in the church. That has always stayed with me and though I didn't believe him then. (what could a priest know of love between a man and a woman?), I found out he was right. There have been moments that sheer willing of love got us through. We will be married 48 years next anniversary. Thank you Tony, A lot of the form examples I never post up here in Members Poetry because they are strictly written to demonstrate a structure. But some have more. When the form and content compliment each other, I do post up here and I am glad you liked it. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted January 23, 2011 Share Posted January 23, 2011 Hi, Tinker. I loved the repetition. It adds music to your poem. I like the structure and the statements. I enjoyed the poem a lot. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted January 23, 2011 Author Share Posted January 23, 2011 Thank you Aleks, I appreciate encouragement and kind words. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted February 10, 2011 Share Posted February 10, 2011 Beautiful and so sadly true. Except, that love might not die as long as those involved still live. Your word choices were beautiful and made this piece flow from one poignant phrase to another. Thanks for sharing this one. Tammi Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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