Frank E Gibbard Posted January 27, 2011 Posted January 27, 2011 A wish so like a fish It flits off with a swish No matter how it's willed The catch oft unfulfilled Of fish à la your angling Rod ever hopeful dangling Our wishes for the best Will face the fishing test Right now an empty net Re-wish and yet and yet Quote
tonyv Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 A metrical endeavor in iambic trimeter, Frank??? Delightful. :) The choice of form and meter, together with the slippery, elusive fish metaphor adequately captures the sentiment of wishful thinking. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
waxwings Posted January 28, 2011 Posted January 28, 2011 Neat. Lines 3 and 4 make an 'epigram' worth while keeping on its own, a crystallization of the whole. Quote
Tinker Posted January 30, 2011 Posted January 30, 2011 Hi Frank, This is great! It's fun, it's easy to read and it's message is oh so true. Loved it! ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com
Benjamin Posted February 1, 2011 Posted February 1, 2011 Hello Frank. This is a delightfully philosophical short poem, the optimism which comes across in the last line is most apt. G. :icon_sunny: Quote
Frank E Gibbard Posted February 17, 2011 Author Posted February 17, 2011 Cheers Tony Wax Tink and Geoff, a fun write, glad you saw something worthwhile in it. Quote
dedalus Posted February 17, 2011 Posted February 17, 2011 Who's poor Rod? No, only joking ... terse, whimsical, reflective: in short, The Compleat Angler. Nice one, Frank! Bren Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim
fdelano Posted February 17, 2011 Posted February 17, 2011 Such is life when waiting, hoping. Enjoyed the eternal moment. Quote
Frank E Gibbard Posted April 4, 2011 Author Posted April 4, 2011 Thanks for comments Bren and Paco. Quote
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